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tearsofpain
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0 posted 2007-06-18 09:02 PM


I hear yelling and wonder where it comes from
It started out as just a sorrowful hum
I got off the bed and walked to the door
Listening to the screaming as I looked at the floor
Through the dining room
The crying gets louder and seems so gloom
I walked passed the kitchen and on my way to the bathroom
The crying gets closer with each step
It ceased for a minute as I stopped to catch my breath
At  the bathroom door I can hear it more
Behind the door which I move there is a mirror
I step to look and my eyes open in terror


I fall to my knees weakened  by what I see
Because the girl who screams just happens to be me!!!!


[This message has been edited by tearsofpain (06-19-2007 01:07 AM).]

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1 posted 2007-06-19 12:18 PM


I fall to my knees weakend by what I see
Because the girl who screams just happens to be me.

love that part, I liked the flow
Hope to read more.

sarah


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2 posted 2007-06-19 06:12 PM


woah what an unexpected ending It was really good the words just drew me in. And the title as well.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

BrittanyJ
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3 posted 2007-06-20 11:30 AM


I loved the flow, and i LOVED the ending Very nice poem!! Hope to see more soon.

There is only so much blood i can bleed for you, and continue to live.

tearsofpain
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4 posted 2007-07-17 11:46 PM


THANK U FRO READING
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