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Dark Poetry #4

Losing a loved one

blue face
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 92

0 posted 2007-06-12 05:35 PM

LOSING A LOVED ONE

The gentle sound of rain pouring over me,

As I run down the stream,tears ripping my face.

Finding no comfort in the world.

When I found out the horrible news,

Hearing the blood curling scream coming from mymom.

Never thought I would see tears coming from my dad.

And all was a black blur.

Cryingout everything until there was nothing

but complete hollowness in me.....

For losing a loved one is like losing your self.

Sir_Vampire
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since 2007-06-12

Posts 96
Johannesburg

1 posted 2007-06-13 01:49 AM

Very nice, how i wish i could lose myself at times

blue face
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 92

2 posted 2007-06-13 07:07 PM

Thanxs sir vampire
I know what you mean

Alaina
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since 2007-06-16

Posts 106

3 posted 2007-06-18 09:01 PM

Cryingout everything until there was nothing

but complete hollowness in me.....

For losing a loved one is like losing your self.

I really liked this part, I thought it flowed nicely and the idea you put down is very true.

blue face
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 92

4 posted 2007-06-19 11:52 AM

Thanxs Alaina.

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