please comment! i needa know if i can read it to that special person.=]

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lovergurl
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since 2007-05-08

Posts 59
va

0 posted 2007-05-23 12:13 PM

and here it is twelve A.M,
can't sleep 'cause I'm thinking of him.
Sometimes I ask myself,"What the hell are you getting yourself into?"
"What am I going to do?"
This guy is really something,
Can't loose with him, all you can do is win.
hah, He brought me a sundrop eleven at night,=]
For him I WILL put up a fight,
I won't give up,
Just beause of what people say and think.. I don't give a fu**.
I messed up some pretty good stuff in my life before,
and I won't let this one walk out the door.
I'm just scared that what he says is all lies,
Because that's usually how it is with the guys.
I'm not used to someone treating me as well as he does.
and you know they say what's meant to be will find it's way,
well..with him, it seems it just gets better every day.
but yet they say you have to fight for what you want,
and for that reason, I know it's not going to be easy.. I know it wont.
but I'll try my best,
so I can just lay in his arms and rest,
so I can look into his eyes and give him a kiss,
hoping that I won't be too nervous and miss. 8p
and yes, I'll confess..
he makes the pain I have hurt a little less.
This boy is something else..

Becca.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-05-24 01:56 AM

wow yes you should definately read it to him this was so sweet, easily relate to.. but you shouldn't have to let someone tell you if you should read it to him or not if it's how you feel and you want him to know then tell him... hope to read more soon.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

lovergurl
Member

since 2007-05-08

Posts 59
va

2 posted 2007-05-24 03:59 PM

awwwww. thanks. and yea i know, I was just insecure about it.. but you know what, you're absolutely right. thanks alot though.=]]]]]

Becca.

Abbeon
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since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

3 posted 2007-05-26 12:08 PM

wow yes you should read it to him. you should never need to ask if you should read it to them.

Exspecialy when you write that good.

Smiles
Abbeon
ps.i like your name at the bottom of your poem its something we share

silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

4 posted 2007-05-26 01:40 AM

"I'm just scared that what he says is all lies,
Because that's usually how it is with the guys.
I'm not used to someone treating me as well as he does.
and you know they say what's meant to be will find it's way,
well..with him, it seems it just gets better every day."

try not to doubt this guy, he sounds lovely, and your very lucky! i hope you show/ed this to him, and i hope he loved it!

as long as we laugh out loud, laugh like we're mad. because this crazy, mixed up beauty is all that we have.

lovergurl
Member

since 2007-05-08

Posts 59
va

5 posted 2007-05-26 02:56 PM

thanks you guys. I really love getting comment on my poems because it lets me know if I'm actually good at this and if people like it. thanks alot!!! and I always repay those who comment me. so be looking for some comments from me!!
=]

Becca.

silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

6 posted 2007-05-26 07:33 PM

heey thanks for all the comments lol, but all those poems are so old! i can barely remember writing them! thanks heaps i'm going to try get some more out, i haven't in a while. tell u what, if u get some more awesome ones out i will too!

as long as we laugh out loud, laugh like we're mad. because this crazy, mixed up beauty is all that we have.

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

7 posted 2007-06-03 04:04 PM

That was really good! he sounds like a wonderful catch! I hope he likes your poem as much as i did!

ladylisa
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since 2007-04-29

Posts 342
Florida USA

8 posted 2007-06-04 12:24 PM

yes do read it to him, you have to take that chance.

Seeker72
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since 2007-02-24

Posts 387
Oregon USA

9 posted 2007-06-04 10:17 PM

I must agree.

A poem from the heart is the true poetry of life.

Read it too him.

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