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tearsofpain
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0 posted 2007-05-17 09:41 PM


LOOKING IN THE MIRROR WATCHING MYSELF FADE
I CAN FEEL MY LIFE SCRAPING AGAINST MY SKIN LIKE A DULL BLADE
THE SCREAMS IN MY HEAD THE  CRYING AND  WISHING I WERE DEAD
SICK OF THE FFING PATHETIC CRIES
CLAWING FOR LIFE AS MY SOUL DIES
A MOMENT OF SILENCE IS NOT IN MY SCRIPT
OH HOW I WANNA WATCH THE SHEETS BLEED AS MY WRIST RIPS
OR MAYBE A ROPE TIED UNDER MY CHIN
EITHER WAY I WILL BE WHAT I DESERVE A CORPSE ROTTING FROM WITHIN
FINALLY I SLEEP SIX FEET DEEP


I  HATE MY LIFE …. HAVE A GOOD DAY

© Copyright 2007 tearsofpain - All Rights Reserved
hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2007-05-18 01:53 AM


hmmm not sure if this is within the guidelines, seeing as it talks about harming yourself without stating it's wrong... But i really like this. I can relate and know what you are saying and feeling. I don't think i have read anything by you so Welcome to Passions
hunnie.

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tearsofpain
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2 posted 2007-05-18 02:44 AM


sorry if this is a bit much when i write i go with my deepest feelings and i let it go.if this offends anyone please let me know i will remove this,i am a very emotional writer.
hunnie_girl
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3 posted 2007-05-23 04:40 PM


well, I do like it though. I love the feeling in it.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

the amazing emo kid
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4 posted 2007-05-23 08:49 PM


yeah this is great! This is what poetry is about, emotion from deep inside you spilling in to words on a page..... or in this case a web page! lol. every one has a day like this.
tearsofpain
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5 posted 2007-06-03 04:00 AM


thank u soo much
aziza
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6 posted 2007-06-03 04:29 AM


You have a lot of talent.  You take me some place that I don't want to go, that I don't always understand ~ but you show me a place that I think is important to learn about.

Alison

ladylisa
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7 posted 2007-06-04 08:08 AM


this is a very deep piece, enjoyed reading it.
tearsofpain
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8 posted 2007-06-14 04:08 PM


thank u
blue face
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9 posted 2007-07-13 01:14 PM


this is amazing loved it
sarah


tearsofpain
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10 posted 2007-07-17 11:48 PM


THANK YOU SOO MUCH
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