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stormdancer
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since 2007-05-10
Posts 31
state of confustion

0 posted 2007-05-10 11:31 PM



Can’t cry, won’t wake, cause I won’t try
Can’t sleep, won’t eat, i’m in too deep,
won’t die, can’t live,  I won’t say goodbye
though the climb’s gettin steep...

Can’t fall, won’t step up, i’m so small
won’t move, can’t scream, ain't got nothin to prove,
won’t do it all,  can’t focus, Is it so bad to fall?
why stuggle to improve?

I can pray, and pray I do, God get me though today.
I’m trapped, help me, before I adapt,
What do I say? I slip, on the ground I lay,
Wait, I’m still here, oh God i’ve snapped...

Mind’s playin tricks again, i’m gonna fall soon, but when?
I’ve been fallin for so long, shoulda hit the ground, maybe i’m wrong?
world’s startin to spin, I close my eyes, tryin to find some calm within,
I know you’re strong, catch me, pull me along.

I’m standin on a cliff lookin below, time pulses, the world begins to slow,
Can I go on, and face another day? To the edge i’m drawn.
sunrise sets the world aglow, but I don’t see it, i’m seeing how close I can go
to the edge without falling. I’m pretty far gone

Won’t heal, can’t die, the world’s surreal,
can’t think, won’t decide, though i’m standin on the brink,
my pain is real, gotta bleed to forget how I feel
I can’t swim, but I won’t sink.

Can’t cry, won’t wake, cause I won’t try
Can’t sleep, won’t eat, i’m in too deep,
won’t die, can’t live,  I won’t say goodbye
though the climb’s gettin steep...

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The_Nameless_One
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since 2007-01-20
Posts 165
Missouri
1 posted 2007-05-11 02:51 PM


Good for a first post you can improve on the rhyming the rhythm is great I like it a lot you should try using a wider vocabulary for your rhymes
hunnie_girl
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Canada
2 posted 2007-05-15 11:47 PM


Welcome to Passions great first post although it was a lottle long I still loved it
hunnie.

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