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andrey
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since 2007-04-27
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0 posted 2007-05-02 01:04 PM



The world is like an open door

But I can’t reach it anymore

I’m standing right in front of it

Without the will.. this is my pit

I’ve lost my fight… though someone bright

Is calling me on the otherside



He’s been through this, I know he did

Something stopped him, he’s not scared

I know he’s coming after me

He knows this place, but I can’t see..

He’s just like me, he has the right

He’s coming to the otherside



My heart is empty, there is no pride

Shut your mouth you’ve got no right

It’s still dark… on the otherside

© Copyright 2007 andrey - All Rights Reserved
stormdancer
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since 2007-05-10
Posts 31
state of confustion
1 posted 2007-05-11 05:23 PM


Nice poem. I like the last line.
carolinabeen
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since 2006-12-12
Posts 69

2 posted 2007-05-12 07:53 AM


I miss the hurt, I miss it being talked about. Theirs mine or ours, I miss the talk nonetheless.


hunnie_girl
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3 posted 2007-05-15 11:58 PM


I loved it. hope to read more soon...
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Kitherion
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since 2006-08-01
Posts 181
Johannesburg
4 posted 2007-05-17 12:37 PM


Awesome poetry... just didn't like the rhyme scheme...

"Our Father who art in Heaven... Hallowed be thy name..."

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
Posts 461
Come find me?
5 posted 2007-06-04 06:56 PM


I liked it a lot! especially the ending.
blue face
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since 2007-06-03
Posts 92

6 posted 2007-07-06 07:05 PM


love this poem!
can diff relate to this...
hope to read more.

sarah


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