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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2007-04-16 12:46 PM


Trying so hard to cover the red,
so nobody knows how many times i've bled,
now I see everyday,
doing this is not ok,

Everyone around me looks so sad,
I never thought it could turn out this bad,
even though I know it's killing you all inside,
you'd die if you knew about the cuts & what I try to hide,

Now I sit here not knowing what to do,
life's been so tough ever since I met you,
the moster the drug I can't help but hate,
but I can't stop using, help came too late.


~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

[This message has been edited by hunnie_girl (04-17-2007 01:53 PM).]

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1 posted 2007-04-16 07:16 AM


Edit the 4th and 6th. Other than that, it was a very good poem. I especially liked the endiing "help came too late" that was so cool.

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2007-04-17 01:57 PM


Thanx for your reply. I fixed up what you said...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Kira Aso
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3 posted 2007-04-22 12:17 PM


Hi hunnie!
I soo luved this!

Awesome as always

Luv Kira

~Should the truth be so buried
in the endless cemetery of broken dreams?~

mged
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4 posted 2007-04-27 03:56 PM


This is so full of feeling like all of yours.
I love all of what you put down on here

KEEP ON

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