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Fairplay Member
since 2007-01-15
Posts 222England |
I am the swinging sixties kid Though born ten years before Now here’s a real story You wouldn't hear before Though my hair was short and clean No flowers round my bonce Or multi coloured whatnots Not me mate.... I’m no ponce My loyalty was to my Queen I Signed and took my shilling Did hard and stupid things? To show that I was willing My sixties they were "Fit and Slim" I rebelled against the "Norm" But I had lots of company Girls loved the uniform....... |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
Very Good! Luved how well everything rhymed (I know poems don't have to rhyme but it helps) Lots of Luv Kira ~Should the truth be so buried |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Well I liked the rhyme in this and the last 2 lines I donno if it was supposed to be funny but i loved it, i had to laugh at that..... hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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