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Twilight Warrior
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since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

0 posted 2007-02-22 05:50 PM

Moonlight shines upon this place
Where naught and nothingness interlace
Where the twilight shards shine serene
Where brokenwinged angels try to fly towards dreams

Sans light, sans darkness, ever dusk and dawn
Time stands still, never moving on
Emptiness stretches out endlessly
This world is home for nobodies like me

With forlorn hope i'll sing my plea
From the hall of broken melodies
Betwixt and between, yet so close to the dark
I question this land, "Where is MY heart"?

My memories, my dreams, are faded and torn
By this barren land, this silent storm
I'll never escape from here it seems
Imprisoned forever.....in fragmented dreams

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-02-22 09:39 PM

~I'll never escape from here it seems
Imprisoned forever.....in fragmented dreams~
Wow just doesn't do this poem justice very good, my warmest welcomes to you great first post...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Twilight Warrior
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since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

2 posted 2007-02-23 01:04 PM

Thanks, glad you liked it.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2007-02-23 02:29 PM

TwilightWarrior~
There is great beauty in your thoughts~
Thank you for sharing them here with us~

WELCOME to PiP~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

Kira Aso
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since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

4 posted 2007-02-25 06:39 PM

Very nicely done!
I hope that you enjoy PIP!!!

RavenSmith
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since 2007-03-02

Posts 53
Oregon

5 posted 2007-03-02 11:34 PM

Yes, those voids are so tough. I liked how you presented this and stirred my imagination. Moonlight is a great place to discover inner self, or rest, or even despair. Great poem!

~Best Regards,Raven Smith

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2007-03-16 08:32 AM

Welcome to Passions.

Excellent description and imagery here. Could feel the barren landscapes of broken dreams.

TD

JenniferMaxwell

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since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

7 posted 2007-07-15 06:51 PM

Well written and lovely use of rhyme, very soft and subtle.

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

8 posted 2007-07-15 06:59 PM

"My memories, my dreams, are faded and torn
By this barren land, this silent storm
I'll never escape from here it seems
Imprisoned forever.....in fragmented dreams"

Wow!! I loved it!! I'm speachless...Very well written

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

blue face
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 92

9 posted 2007-07-16 05:29 PM

Will honestly replying this is a very great piece of poem.hope to read more.

tearsofpain
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since 2007-05-03

Posts 38

10 posted 2007-07-17 11:45 PM

I REALLY LIKED THIS DEF RELATE FROM BEGINING TO END

Twilight Warrior
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since 2007-02-22

Posts 106
The World That Never Was

11 posted 2007-08-01 01:08 PM

Thanks for the comments....sorry for the late reply. I've been well......"disconnected".

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

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