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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2007-02-12 12:27 PM


Bitter sweet memories passing through my eyes,
it hurts to know all this time we built our love on lies,
I though for awhile we could work it through,
but now I know there's to much we had to do,

I haven't seen you since that day,
When I packed my bags and moved away,
so seeing you yesterday killed me inside,
I hate the thought, that we should have tried,

you're with someone new so maybe the problem was me,
right now I'm thinking of that possibility,
maybe I need to find a good man,
but unless I forget you I don't know if I can.


~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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Kira Aso
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1 posted 2007-02-15 08:55 AM



Hey hunnie! I get to comment first!!! (Does the happy dance)
This is prob my most favorite from you yet!

~so seeing you yesterday killed me inside,
I hate the thought, that we should have tried~

I know the feeling. I saw my ex the other day and I could feel my heart wrenching the same way I feel it now after reading your awesome poem!

Luv ya lots!!!
Kira

hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2007-02-18 11:33 PM


Awe tx Kira it's always nice to hear from you
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

chiLanta
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3 posted 2007-02-26 01:32 PM


awe man that was a good poem, and that feeling does kill you inside dont it
RavenSmith
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4 posted 2007-03-03 03:42 PM


I think I am lucky in some respects. Every man I left wasnt worth keeping. It would be far tougher for me if the guy was a good guy and the relationship didnt work. Great poem. Thank goodness for time. It does seal the heart with moving on.

~Best Regards,Raven Smith

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5 posted 2007-03-04 01:20 PM


I can relate to that feeling. Excellent poem. And that is the truth...

"One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came"

Tomer
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6 posted 2007-03-04 02:57 PM



A revealing post.  I enjoyed it very much.  Seems like you have been through some pain, and there is no better way of coping with it, then through the venue of writing.  Well done piece.  Look forward to more in the future.

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