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Amaya
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since 2007-01-23
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Mississippi

0 posted 2007-01-23 11:36 PM




Dreams are images behind your eyes
Consist of things you tend to hide.
Wishes you hold dear to your heart
Where in your dreams, never fall apart

Dreams are thoughts in your mind
Ones you daydream about all the time
They are there when you sleep in your bed
Images of your deepest thoughts dancing inside your head

In time, dreams do fall apart
Crushing and bleeding your gentle heart.
Your dreams soon become your nightmare
You know it is a dream, so you tend not to care.

You know it is a dream but you still scream and shout
You knew sooner or later this would come about
Dreams are just fantasies
And that is what they will forever be.

[This message has been edited by Amaya (01-24-2007 06:55 PM).]

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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
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1 posted 2007-01-25 07:57 PM


A warm and customarily dark welcome, Amaya.

I like this one. I was thinking "Ooh, nice, dreams."
Turned out to be quite different from that, which I liked.

Hollow.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

Abbeon
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since 2006-11-30
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Curiousity, and wonder
2 posted 2007-01-26 04:05 PM


i understand that... that was so close to what i was thinking... please, please write more.
hunnie_girl
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3 posted 2007-01-26 10:14 PM


I reallt liked this a lot the flow musta been the flow and the words...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

unpredictable_mortal
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since 2007-01-27
Posts 10
Malaysia
4 posted 2007-01-27 12:15 PM


Dreams are mostly your hidden conciousness and it makes us want it so bad to come true but ended up becoming an illusion we live in.

Good write!

Amaya
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since 2007-01-23
Posts 10
Mississippi
5 posted 2007-02-03 01:07 AM


Thanks for the comments.  They mean a lot to me since I'm just really starting to get into poetry. Deeply that is.

Let me know when I'm finally apart of this group
So I won't be the one looking like a fool

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