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ivordavies
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since 2007-01-10
Posts 739
Chester, England

0 posted 2007-01-18 06:34 PM


Armageddon

When Angels fall and Devils fly,
what fun there'll be in all the sky.
Whilst Angels struggle in the dirt
with dusty shrouds and wings that hurt.

The sky will shine with Satan's fire,
with Mankind raised to places higher.
While God's disciples crawl on Earth
to give the new Almighty mirth.

Come join our throng, enjoy the fight,
Mankind's direction is in sight.
A little bloodshed will not hurt
as with eternal power we flirt.

Ivor G Davies

The moment created this second, is a  moment that's going to last.
It lives the full spectrum of time, the future, the present and past.

© Copyright 2007 Ivor G Davies - All Rights Reserved
Ireni_Dreams
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since 2007-01-18
Posts 3

1 posted 2007-01-18 07:11 PM


I am new to this forum and a writer of poetry myself.  I enjoyed reviewing your piece of work. Your expression was very well stated and flow was pretty good. I would like to thank you for sharing this piece.

My favorite part of your piece is listed below.

When Angels fall and Devils fly,
what fun there'll be in all the sky.
Whilst Angels struggle in the dirt
with dusty shrouds and wings that hurt

~hugs
Ireni

ivordavies
Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739
Chester, England
2 posted 2007-01-18 07:20 PM


Ireni,

Thank you for reading and responding, I too have only been on the site for some eight days, but I have found the natives very friendly.

Look forward to reading your poetry,

Ivor

The moment created this second, is a  moment that's going to last.
It lives the full spectrum of time, the future, the present and past.

Ireni_Dreams
New Member
since 2007-01-18
Posts 3

3 posted 2007-01-18 07:24 PM


This is such a different site than what I am used to.  There is a place for once you read and review you rate.  I don't see anything here for that.
Do you know of anything like that?  Or is this primarily just a write/reply kinda forum?..Nevertheless I would have rated this piece a 4 for sure..Out of 5 star's..

I am going to post something as soon as I find a place to place my work.

~hugs
Ireni

hunnie_girl
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4 posted 2007-01-18 10:25 PM


No there is no rate thing on this site mostly write and get critiques or good jobs or some people even give bad replies but nevertheless it's still cool(well ok I think it is ) hmmmm Ivor, I liked this, Although I agree with Ireni the first stanza it the best...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

trutodaraiders
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since 2006-12-02
Posts 820
CA
5 posted 2007-02-13 07:59 PM


Enjoyed your thought here my friend
Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA
6 posted 2007-02-13 10:48 PM


sounds like what's going on in Iraq!!!! Angels are falling and devils are flying...good work!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

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