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Kira Aso
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0 posted 2007-01-11 02:44 AM




Close my eyes and hold back a shudder
Walk through the cold and silently mutter
Holding back the pain that jabs me deep inside
Doing all I can to keep back the raging tide
The freezing wind numbs my body but not my mind
This life I’ve been living has not been kind
Trying to hide the red lines that cover my arms
Going through the motions and living with the harms
No one notices cause no one wants to see
All of the hurting going on inside of me
I can deal with the frigid winter as it tears me apart
But I can’t deal with this pain that’s tearing out my heart



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sgreybe
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1 posted 2007-01-11 04:29 AM


Really really good, Kira!  Gut wrenching, the pain really tears.  Loved it! Sylvia.
Kira Aso
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2 posted 2007-01-11 12:50 PM


Thanx Sylvia! I'm so happy you liked!!!
Some times when emotions go nutso and I feel so amazingly alone this is how I find myself feeling.
It's funny how we can hurt so much but not really be in any physical pain at all.

Thanx again!
Luv Kira

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3 posted 2007-01-12 09:55 PM


Kira this was beautiful...
~Trying to hide the red lines that cover my arms
Going through the motions and living with the harms
No one notices cause no one wants to see
All of the hurting going on inside of me
I can deal with the frigid winter as it tears me apart
But I can’t deal with this pain that’s tearing out my heart~

This part was the best it was like looking in the mirror man, amazing. ohhhh I loved this...
luv hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Kira Aso
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4 posted 2007-01-13 10:59 PM


I'm sooo happy you liked it hunnie!!!

I've been kinda outa wack lately (I've had so much going on!)  This poem says what I can't say. I'm hurting plain and simple and yet there seems no way to make the hurting stop. (You think there's a pill for this too?)

Luv you lots hunnie!
Kira

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5 posted 2007-02-01 12:38 PM


Nice Write girl. Hunnie already said what the best part is so there is no need for me to be redundant. But really good write nonetheless.
Kira Aso
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6 posted 2007-02-01 08:57 AM



Thankyou much!

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7 posted 2007-02-01 03:58 PM


A pill for this for huting there is but... I don't really think pills work for this Time heals all wounds, good luck though Kira...
Luv,
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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