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voice2bheard
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0 posted 02-11-2008 10:45 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

You wanted to feel important, so you said yes

Broke a girls heart, after she brought that dress

You made her feel wanted and loved

but you just felt she wasn't good enough

The laughs and the smiles were all pretend

A womens heart you know isn't so easy to mend

You touch her, she screams, you watch her fall

You could care less about her life afterall

The advantage you take is so far well known

When all she wanted was a safe place, a home

She gave you her time, her love her passion

but your heart was well closed, safely fastened

You didn't care much for her, not even at all

You just chuckled in your mind, as you watched her fall

The innocence you killed, her life in dispair

Now all she does is dream and wish you were there

She sits at home, alone in the dark

With sighs of loneliness, because you broke her heart

but she thinks inside, I have to be strong

The advantage, I have wasn't you all along

The advantage was me, as she sees her face

I don't have to be alone, in this lonely place

I may have loved you once before

but my heart will belong to me, forever more

Kate

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voice2bheard
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1 posted 02-11-2008 10:47 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

This poem is about trying to forget someone you spent alot of your life with.

Kate

midnightdreamer
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2 posted 02-11-2008 07:13 PM       View Profile for midnightdreamer   Email midnightdreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for midnightdreamer

mmmmm..........very good poem.  the meaning is something different but good.  I always love your work.

midnightdreamer

shattered-smiles
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inside the shadows


3 posted 02-11-2008 07:30 PM       View Profile for shattered-smiles   Email shattered-smiles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shattered-smiles

Great poem, voice2bheard.  I like it especially how you tell the story in your poem and then put a twist to it at the end.  Very nicely written and as midnightdreamer said, I love your work.
TJ

[&] she's a blood broken rose

Fareed
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4 posted 02-12-2008 04:47 AM       View Profile for Fareed   Email Fareed   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fareed

Some heavy rhyming here.
voice2bheard
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5 posted 02-12-2008 01:04 PM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

Thank you I'm glad you all like it!!

Kate

KgIRL
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6 posted 02-15-2008 06:50 AM       View Profile for KgIRL   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for KgIRL

i read this twice, i like it, and it was well written!
did this happen to you?
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7 posted 02-18-2008 08:13 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

i only had to read it once to understand the messege behind your words. its sad but it has a happy ending.... sort-of... Great write! i can't wait to see more!!

~Zach~
Mystress May
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8 posted 02-20-2008 08:46 PM       View Profile for Mystress May   Email Mystress May   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mystress May

Kate..... as always, I truly enjoy your work.
voice2bheard
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9 posted 02-25-2008 10:24 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

Thank you and no this did not happen to me its just a poem and a very scary thought.

Kate

voice2bheard
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10 posted 12-16-2009 04:33 AM       View Profile for voice2bheard   Email voice2bheard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit voice2bheard's Home Page   View IP for voice2bheard

ACTUALLY NOW THINKING ABOUT IT I THINK THIS DID HAPPEN TO ME BUT LATER ON AFTER THIS WAS ALREADY WRITTEN!! HOW IRONIC OMG!!

Kate

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