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voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

0 posted 2008-02-11 10:45 AM

You wanted to feel important, so you said yes

Broke a girls heart, after she brought that dress

You made her feel wanted and loved

but you just felt she wasn't good enough

The laughs and the smiles were all pretend

A womens heart you know isn't so easy to mend

You touch her, she screams, you watch her fall

You could care less about her life afterall

The advantage you take is so far well known

When all she wanted was a safe place, a home

She gave you her time, her love her passion

but your heart was well closed, safely fastened

You didn't care much for her, not even at all

You just chuckled in your mind, as you watched her fall

The innocence you killed, her life in dispair

Now all she does is dream and wish you were there

She sits at home, alone in the dark

With sighs of loneliness, because you broke her heart

but she thinks inside, I have to be strong

The advantage, I have wasn't you all along

The advantage was me, as she sees her face

I don't have to be alone, in this lonely place

I may have loved you once before

but my heart will belong to me, forever more

Kate

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

1 posted 2008-02-11 10:47 AM

This poem is about trying to forget someone you spent alot of your life with.

Kate

midnightdreamer
Member

since 2008-02-03

Posts 309
Roy,ut

2 posted 2008-02-11 07:13 PM

mmmmm..........very good poem. the meaning is something different but good. I always love your work.

midnightdreamer

shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

3 posted 2008-02-11 07:30 PM

Great poem, voice2bheard. I like it especially how you tell the story in your poem and then put a twist to it at the end. Very nicely written and as midnightdreamer said, I love your work.
TJ

[&] she's a blood broken rose

Fareed
Member

since 2008-02-08

Posts 75

4 posted 2008-02-12 04:47 AM

Some heavy rhyming here.

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

5 posted 2008-02-12 01:04 PM

Thank you I'm glad you all like it!!

Kate

KgIRL
Junior Member

since 2007-11-14

Posts 14
australia

6 posted 2008-02-15 06:50 AM

i read this twice, i like it, and it was well written!
did this happen to you?

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

7 posted 2008-02-18 08:13 PM

i only had to read it once to understand the messege behind your words. its sad but it has a happy ending.... sort-of... Great write! i can't wait to see more!!

~Zach~

Mystress May
Member

since 2007-10-25

Posts 296
Taunton, MA

8 posted 2008-02-20 08:46 PM

Kate..... as always, I truly enjoy your work.

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

9 posted 2008-02-25 10:24 AM

Thank you and no this did not happen to me its just a poem and a very scary thought.

Kate

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

10 posted 2009-12-16 04:33 AM

ACTUALLY NOW THINKING ABOUT IT I THINK THIS DID HAPPEN TO ME BUT LATER ON AFTER THIS WAS ALREADY WRITTEN!! HOW IRONIC OMG!!

Kate

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