navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #4 » Part
Dark Poetry #4
Post A Reply Post New Topic Part Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
carolinabeen
Member
since 2006-12-12
Posts 69


0 posted 2006-12-19 05:42 AM


no chance he has with her
all he sees is her
every all is her

taste is different
what
she is
he would give
he is she would
give

it's all he can try
it's all she can pray
for

if never he'd never
if ever she'd be


© Copyright 2006 carolinabeen - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
1 posted 2006-12-19 06:38 PM


your poetry has an interesting form to it...

leaves alot between the lines to think about~~
I forgot to welcome you~~
M

Russell8624
Member
since 2006-11-28
Posts 99
Minnesota
2 posted 2006-12-21 02:13 AM


...I want the thirty seconds it took me to read that back.
rockbabe
Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 105

3 posted 2006-12-21 05:05 AM


Needs work???!

Please
R

Darken Rahl
New Member
since 2006-12-22
Posts 1
i stay in cape town... if you don't know then get a map
4 posted 2006-12-22 09:28 PM


Hey.
Wow it's rather different but I like it... Very vague but it makes it more interesting.
Nice work.

D.

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Dark Poetry #4 » Part

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary