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Anathema |
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Guthwulf New Member
since 2006-11-10
Posts 7New Zealand |
Inspired by a friend of mine. There is a sub poem formed by the last lines of each verse. The first 3lines in each stanza set the 'scene and experience' and the last lines in each stanza describe her inner thoughts or feelings. Tell me what you think: Anathema In innocence I laughed and played, And loved as if no time remained. By kith and kin I was betrayed, Alone amidst this world of cares. At first methought I did perceive, That happiness could be achieved. But now I feel I've been deceived, Enthralled and snared by brackish fears. Constrained to solemn repining, Sanity - slowly declining. Madly venting and refining These silent screams nobody hears. I sought for joys that flesh doth measure, Yet misery outweighed my pleasure. Anathema became my treasure, A sickness I can't stand to bear. Those drinks and drugs don't kill the pain - There's always shadows that remain. Like Demons dancing on my brain, Tainting my soul beyond repair. Although I burnt that bridge, for sure, The thought of you helps me endure. The one I'll love forevermore - Oh, how i wish that you were here. Any critiquing and comments would be welcome, heres a quick list of word definitions if it helps anyone: Anathema - 1. a person or thing detested or loathed: That subject is anathema to him. 2. a person or thing accursed or consigned to damnation or destruction. 3. a curse, execration. Brackish - Dank, unwholesome, long standing. Snared - Entangled, Caught unawares Enthralled - Enslaved Constrained - Compelled, urged Repining - Fretting discontentedly, not for the first time We admire people for their talents, |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
very nice A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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Guthwulf New Member
since 2006-11-10
Posts 7New Zealand |
Thankee. It's one of the very few i actually get around to finishing. Im always tweaking and correcting so i figured just get it done for once. I like it anyhoo :P We admire people for their talents, |
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