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0 posted 2006-11-07 12:14 PM


Not in a long time
hunnie

It's been awhile since I let my teardrops fall,
but my tears don't know my heart at all,
I tried so hard to keep them locked away,
but it wasn't that hard until today,

I never wished for you to make me sad,
but you did, I cracked and it made me mad,
you drew me in, made me cry,
a fugitive tear escaped my eye,

It felt hot underneath my lids,
will I break or not? start the bids,
then they flew out and fell to the ground,
it killed me to know I had lost this round,

Mom, now I know, I feel your pain,
you have a sobering effect to make me sane,
'cause sharing our tears was not done in awhile,
we are family again, it made me smile,

It has never happened this rough before,
there was this sharp pain I couldn't ignore,
shedding my tears made me realize I have not done this,
not in a long time.


A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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Kira Aso
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1 posted 2006-11-13 08:06 AM



Hey hunnie!
(Don't know how I missed this!)

I loved the way the whole thing flowed.
(I can't seem to make anything flow at the moment)

I really think you have that special talent with words that most of us lack.
You keep on writing!!!

~Luv Kira

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2 posted 2006-11-13 11:45 PM


awe thanks for replying Kira...
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

Abbeon
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3 posted 2006-12-02 12:29 PM


Your are not kidding, the last time i creid was when someone died thanks for sharring your a star hunnine

your friend- abbeon

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4 posted 2006-12-04 12:00 PM


thanks Abbeon, haha sometimes you try so hard not to cry but it always happens anyway grrrr...
heeheee.
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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5 posted 2007-01-02 02:37 PM


you have a voice hunnie
always something worth saying
may i suggest you try a different structure to your rhyme( spelling-i am dxlectic and spelling evades me)
i always enjoy your work
arthur
aka mike

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6 posted 2007-01-02 10:35 PM


Thanks you Mike, it's always a pleasure to hear from you, i shall try what you suggested, although i am not to sure how to start but i'll certainly try...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Sarka
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7 posted 2007-01-14 11:11 AM


I really enjoy that you are able to put your deepest feelings in words.  Many of your poems are so close to my reality as well.  Thank you for sharing
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