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click1
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since 2003-03-25
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0 posted 2006-11-01 11:32 PM



Kicked
and clawed,
I'm not fallen.

Another
day I,
come a callin'.

Not
to be,
forgotten this time.

Persecute
me not,
on this rhyme.

Every
dog has,
his own day.

Now
it's my,
turn to play.



Click

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hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2006-11-03 12:23 PM


short... a lot of rhyming, still could add more depth to the sentences maybe(make longer more feeling) but nevertheless shows great potential...
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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