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poison
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0 posted 2006-10-13 02:34 AM



In a fever of a minute
Lifeless,unveiled
thinly disguised memoirs
Spring to life
Hunting familiar grounds
Weaving a poetic spell
of sealed,startling,sensational revelations..
The poignancy of perverted despair
of bad karma,separation and reconciliation
and of silent,mustered hopes feeding the Earth
to face the stirred midnight's inertia
by embracing the mystical genesis of life
as our fates intertwined...
in desperation of strange fits of passion

© Copyright 2006 poison - All Rights Reserved
Songbird
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1 posted 2006-10-13 08:14 AM


Welcome to PIP!  Really enjoyed your poem, you really show that you have a good command of the English language, your vocabulary is very advanced. I wish I could write so well.
stargal
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2 posted 2006-10-13 09:13 AM


Hi poison

Welcome to the darker side of passions! It's nice to see a new face joining.What a great first post to start your time off with pip

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino            @-->---

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3 posted 2006-10-13 12:04 PM


poison!
Welcome to Passions. And though I'm no critic, I think you're good and this is an excellent opening to your time here in these blue walls. Very well done with much imagery and things to ponder. Hope you love it here half as much as I have.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

JenniferMaxwell
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4 posted 2006-10-13 06:44 PM


Welcome to PIP.

Love the opening line in your poem. Hope to see you post more.

trUstNooNe
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5 posted 2006-10-14 11:43 PM


wow i really nice job..i like alot..
Khatharsis
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6 posted 2006-10-15 12:37 PM


great peice. And as like others have already said. great opening peice to start off your days here.
SATURN
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7 posted 2006-10-15 06:20 PM


Welcome to pip very nice write loved it.
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8 posted 2006-10-15 10:50 PM


Welcome to passions this was a very well written first post. Also the vocabulary was impeccable.
hunnie*   

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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