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cherrys_rule
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since 2006-03-18
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0 posted 2006-10-03 05:48 PM



I guess I could have sent a letter from the road,
with words that always meant more than updates on the phone.
The signal's fading fast and the ink is running out.
The words look good in pen,
but it would sound better from my mouth.
Please hold me tightly, I don't care if I can't breathe tonight.
Forget these lungs, their jealousy.
I'm burning out, but I can't leave this all behind.
Behind your back, talking like knives.
I can hardly breathe.
Sharpen your tongue the rest of your life.
Like I cannot believe anything that you said.
So you're the fire and I'm the water.
I am the balence and you are the color.
I won't forget you when we're not together.
This is the ending, here's my surrender.

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TwiztidKarma
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since 2006-09-22
Posts 43
Florida
1 posted 2006-10-03 05:53 PM


; )
CrEaTuRe
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since 2000-01-01
Posts 260
Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia
2 posted 2006-10-04 10:05 PM


Like the flow of words

CrEaTuRe aka Jazvina Lahre

Kira Aso
Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351
Closer to Hell...
3 posted 2006-10-05 09:37 AM


Beautiful!

I Really, really loved this!
The words came together perfectly, and I love every part!

Loved it lots!!!


cherrys_rule
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since 2006-03-18
Posts 442

4 posted 2006-10-06 01:26 PM


thanks you guys I really appreciate your comments. This is one of the poems I really like as well

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