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Dark Poetry #4

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Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2006-09-20 09:24 PM

I guess I have always written a little dark
It likes to creep out
and grab my ankles

That’s when it pulls me under
And fear is my new bother
While I take refuge in insanity
All my hope is crushed by doubt

And then my sense of direction
becoming a spinning campus

I could never see well in the dark
And when the cold set in to my room
I'd hide beneath sheets and close my eyes
I just figured if I couldn't see
I might as well find some warmth, some refuge

In retrospect of life
I shake my head and laugh
At least now I can dream
and I can choose to go
When I feal it coming
And that's why I smile
again

-<>-~-<>-~-<>-
* Juju *
-<>-~-<>-~-<>-

JenniferMaxwell

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since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

1 posted 2006-09-20 09:39 PM

Dark creeping out and grabbing your ankles and fear being your new brother, awesome lines in an outstanding poem!!

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

2 posted 2006-09-21 10:22 PM

Thank you

-JUju

click1
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since 2003-03-25

Posts 152
usa

3 posted 2006-09-28 08:37 PM

AAahh!! Fear....Well done!

Click

Triskaidekaphobia
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since 2003-02-05

Posts 251
In a state of disrepair...

4 posted 2006-10-03 11:34 AM

"All my hope is crushed by doubt"

An excellent line amongst a whole poem of excellent lines!

Great poem Juju.

"The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun
With Coca Cola clouds behind a Big Mac sun."

One God by The Beautiful South

Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

5 posted 2006-10-04 10:22 AM

Happy to finally read your work! (It's really good)

Thank you for sharing!

Hugs and Hershey bars!!!

~Kira

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

6 posted 2006-10-04 04:01 PM

Thank you. I am glad you like it.

-Juju

-<>-~-<>-~-<>-
* Juju *
-<>-~-<>-~-<>-

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