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lanaia74
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0 posted 2006-09-15 09:46 AM



The wolves howl in the desolate background
The owl screeches eerily above my head
This is the kind of night that makes you feel hell bound
Kind of like the night and evil wed.

A kind of night that makes me uneasy to be alone
So dark the night feels like a blanket covering me
So deathly cold I feel chilled to the bone
So dark I can't see in front of me,

No moon shining down so I can see
For daylight I would pay a few
It is like I have to feel my way step by step
Unlock the darkness help me find the key.

Wishing I could feel the sunshine on my face
But all I can feel is dampness and a chill
All I can see is darkness' black lace
The blackness seems it's overflowing it may even spill.

Nothing I can do to change the darkness in the night
Needing to face my fears of the devilish black
The dark and blackness give me an ungodly fright
Courage against the black I lack.



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1 posted 2006-09-16 12:12 PM


You've set the scene so well in your opening lines. You draw the reader in by describing the both sounds and feel of that eerie night. Your phrase "black lace" used to describe the darkness really captured my imagination. I can remember watching black clouds one night and that's exactly what they looked like, black lace over a pale, pale moon. Enjoyed reading your poem very much!
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