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Dark Poetry #4

Stainless Steel

Sorrow
Member

since 2006-06-14

Posts 83
Ireland

0 posted 2006-08-23 09:50 AM

Can you keep a secret?
Can you hide my shame?
May I wash my blood from you
and draw this wound again?

So many times I've tried
To keep you at arms lenght
To push you from my thoughts,
find other ways to vent.

I lock you in my drawer
throw away the key
but you keep on screaming
begging to be free

As my mind collapses in
and my thoughts return to you
i release you from your prison
relieve me as you do.

That old familiar sting
that old familiar stain
It's all that keeps me going
It's what eases tastlest pain.

But oh the guilty feeling
It comes on just as quick
as the dirty gash
as the burning prick

So hide my little secret
Wash away my trickle red
stainless steel oh how you gleam
and put my pain to bed.

lanaia74
Member

since 2006-08-25

Posts 67

1 posted 2006-08-25 01:54 PM

Superb! Bravo! Applauds!

burntsiena
Junior Member

since 2006-08-10

Posts 34
Rhode Island

2 posted 2006-08-26 12:22 PM

great rhyme - the poem is really fluid with a wonderful flow - always good to have an ending with a sorta twist

sgreybe
Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 209
London, UK

3 posted 2006-09-14 06:45 AM

It just gets better and better! I have become a fan! I really like your work Sorrow, and this piece in particular. Strikes a rather resounding gong inside. Great work, Sylvia.

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