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click1
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since 2003-03-25
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0 posted 2006-07-19 11:16 PM



Keep pushing,
I keep calling.

Keep on raising,
I'm not falling

So you say,
"Bring it on"

and I say,
"It's been too long!"

Look to the sky,
the winds have changed.

YOU will never
be the same.

The life you have,
you hold so dear?

Do not forget,
that I am there.

Walk, don't run,
show no fear.

I'm the master,
of now and here!

One step toward,
the final end.

And YOU have lost,
your only friend.

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Digital_Hell
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since 2006-06-05
Posts 202
Amidst black roses
1 posted 2006-07-20 04:13 PM


Interesting. I have felt somewhat the same way a few times and could relate.

"YOU will never
be the same.

The life you have,
you hold so dear?"

I especially liked this part. The question i felt was almost mocking in a way and i loved it!

hells gate reads Abandon hope all ye that enter here
shall we go?
the road to hell is paved with good intentions.
Will you walk with me?

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
2 posted 2006-07-20 05:23 PM


"I'm the master,
of now and here!

One step toward,
the final end.

And YOU have lost,
your only friend. "


I liked this poem a lot! I guess it reminds me of all the times I had horrible "friends" and I shoved it back in their faces by telling them to get out of my life...

I loved the question mark you put there also, I felt like it added a great deal to those lines.

Thanks for sharing

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click1
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since 2003-03-25
Posts 152
usa
3 posted 2006-07-20 10:24 PM


Thanx!!
    My best friend turned on me like a wild animal....over money..of all things..LOL.


I kept given',
she kept takin'.

I was true,
she was fakin'.

     "It's time to call it."
     ~ My own dear Mother.        

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