Getting over it and taking the lead

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Venus1974
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 79
Tennessee, USA

0 posted 2006-07-19 11:13 PM

They act like its so easy like its a simple task

but why is it for them and not me I ask?

I have tried to "deal with it " but just can not compete

with this ugliness inside some hidden so deep

I am ready for healing that really really lasts

head on I take it and its dark cold blasts

I can take it on beat it down quick

only my mind does not let me pick

Fighting on my journey I take a bunch of paths

so here I am again sailing forward full masts

I wanna be free of all of this pain

some is understandable but this much is insane

I walk along the roadside and fear the worst

inside my heart pounds feels it will burst

I walk in the shadows - behind the scene

trying to avoid what could be whats unseen

I want so much to love but how can I when I dont love me

This has always been a puzzle to the unknown me

how can one say that I do not know

the feelings on the inside they grow and they grow

Pain and resentment to say the least

when I feel these out comes my inner beast

Be tough...and take it like a man

well excuse me dont think that I can

So quit telling me its all just a game

inside my world it makes me feel shame

I shouldnt feel this way so I am told

but I can not help it it is how it did unfold

Peace and happiness to us all, Venus

Digital_Hell
Member

since 2006-06-05

Posts 202
Amidst black roses

1 posted 2006-07-20 04:16 PM

I liked the flow and style of the poem. I really enjoyed reading it. I could relate to some of the feelings here. Well written and definately interesting. Keep it up

hells gate reads Abandon hope all ye that enter here
shall we go?
the road to hell is paved with good intentions.
Will you walk with me?

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-07-20 05:34 PM

Hey Venus1974,

Awesome poem! I liked how you set it up in lines and not stanzas, it adds to the look of the poem and the flow. Which, I might add, I also liked the flow in this it was different but very nicely done.

I can't really relate to all of this but I also can relate to some. The first two lines I can really relate too! I think you did a great job with this poem.

Thanks for sharing, I can't wait to see more

@-->---

Venus1974
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 79
Tennessee, USA

3 posted 2006-07-23 10:03 PM

Thanx to both of you...not all of my poetry is dark and depressing but, a large portion of it is...thanx again for the replies

Peace and happiness to us all, Venus

youngfirefly
Junior Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 12

4 posted 2006-12-01 03:54 PM

I like what you did with this poem.. I hope that writing poetry allows you to release sone of the feelings that you have inside. I can sort of relate to this poem because when I went through depression very few people understood why I was acting so wierd.

I really do hope that you find do someone to help you.

Abbeon
Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

5 posted 2006-12-01 11:46 PM

Nice, i could definitely do with a few tips from you thanks -Abbeon

mechanical_animal
New Member

since 2006-11-30

Posts 7

6 posted 2006-12-03 03:07 AM

i loved this poem. i can relate better than i would like to and i think i like it so much because i can relate so well. really really good work.

Venus1974
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 79
Tennessee, USA

7 posted 2006-12-10 09:04 PM

Thanx everyone for your comments they mean a lot to me.

arthur
Senior Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

8 posted 2006-12-11 03:37 PM

loved it
could do with a little tidying
but nothing important
so good it speaks out
arthur

Venus1974
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 79
Tennessee, USA

9 posted 2007-02-09 03:16 PM

Arthur would like to know what your suggestions on tidying it up would be thanc, Venus

Peace and happiness to us all, Venus

RavenSmith
Member

since 2007-03-02

Posts 53
Oregon

10 posted 2007-03-02 05:57 PM

Nice poem. I understand this much these days and I know for me, letting go of loss is the only way for my own clarity. "Letting Go" saying good riddens to all that held me in prison and realizing that doesnt mean another bar won't come but the ones in the past, are no longer.

Nice message in your poem. Enjoyed!

~Best Regards,Raven Smith

Venus1974
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 79
Tennessee, USA

11 posted 2007-07-30 11:06 AM

Thank you Raven so true.

Peace and happiness to us all, Venus

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.