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Philmont
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0 posted 2006-07-13 01:35 AM


Someones when I look down on you and realize there's
nothing much left of you, it strikes me that when we both
look to the sun (if that's what you call it now) there
isn't much there either.

Maybe you could enlighten me, how did we get all the
way out here, in the darkness wandering around something
we once believed existed but now can hardly see?

Was it Neptune, what they call a God of the Sea?
He lost us, didn't he?  He was blue, blue as the


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stargal
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1 posted 2006-07-14 10:19 AM


I'm not sure I understood all of this but what I did understand I liked. I thought it was an interesting poem to read, something slightly different than anything else.

Although, I think that the first word is supposed to be "sometimes" but I'm not sure?

Very good write though, I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing

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2 posted 2006-07-14 11:09 AM



"Maybe you could enlighten me" ?

This doesn't seem to be complete ... is there more to it ?

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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