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Out on a plain
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Out on a plain |
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zaz Junior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 26 |
Out on a plain, infinite horizon line, I am a stick like figure walking to nowhere. In the distance of this lost place, flashes of red, Pulsate at the perimeter of vision. lavender black, leeches into growing red pulses. A high pitched sound begins to bite with shattering intensity. Visceral in its monstrous attack. Flesh is raked by sharp whips of silver gold growing from tentacles blossoming from the lavender darkness slithery and gurgling with evil intent. I run to escape the sloshing hell creeping across the white plain. In relentless pursuit it's design is my end. Snake like the tentacles slap near me, Repugnant smells of decay and rot Consuming the air around. Thousand of hard, cold, red and green eyes peer Through the tip of a giant being bursting through the plain. An umbrella of ghastly sight. It's mouth a cave of needle teeth dripping with poison, A plate of spaghetti gone rabid In the festering night. I scream in terror, hope this b movie will be over soon. Pass the popcorn please. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
LOL! Wow... Not what i was expecting for the ending. Very neat ending though, it's unique. I thought you'd have something like "i died, etc" but no, your ending was awesome! I loved how you described "yourself" as a stick like figure, I thought that was kind of cool... "A high pitched sound begins to bite with shattering intensity. Visceral in its monstrous attack." My favorite part, it's because of the way you described the noise I think. It's interesting to read. I like the descriptiveness of the poem. Great job on this, I can't wait to read more by you  @-->--- |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
That was really cool. It sounds like some of the stuff I've written at some point in the past. God bless, In Chirst, -Craig To wrestle is to live; to fight is to love. |
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rockbabe Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 105 |
Very , very, very enjoyable read. Full of suspense, surprising ending though. Love it ,R |
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zaz Junior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 26 |
Thanks for the response, I have a couple of these little dittys.Glad to share sometime in future. |
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