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zigwield
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since 2006-06-25
Posts 61


0 posted 2006-07-01 10:19 AM


i saw a dream
last night
i saw there a tree
it was so nice

i saw the road
it was straight
but all else is cold
so i needed faith

statics, noise and voices
do not close ears do not shut the eyes
just keep on rolling the wheels
and have an open mind

respond is just a few times wise
what we need is to walk
i do not try to advertize
likers and drinks but only talk

creepers and feeding monsters
i salute your motives
but to remind you uncles
i am your child
if you have not yet noticed

and remember what i say
i try to hide in you
the prize is enough to pay
i just want to be with you


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Digital_Hell
Member
since 2006-06-05
Posts 202
Amidst black roses
1 posted 2006-07-01 05:55 PM


A nice write. I could relate to it, just dont let your faith blind you, and make sure the person you want to be with is the right person.

hells gate reads Abandon hope all ye that enter here
shall we go?
the road to hell is paved with good intentions.
Will you walk with me?

stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
2 posted 2006-07-02 01:31 AM


I’m not sure that I understood this the way you might’ve wanted us too, but I liked this a lot. It was different, a little confusing for me in parts, but interesting. As soon as you started reading the first stanza you just wanted to keep on reading and reading. It kind of captured me, I couldn’t stop until I reached the end and yet even than I still wanted to read more. Poems like that I can’t help but love, they have like a magnetic draw, and this one certainly had that for me! It was brilliant…

Thanks so much for sharing

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