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green_itchy_stuff
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since 2003-06-26
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0 posted 2006-06-30 05:27 PM



I see them
The masses
Confused on my feet

I only want to love them all
How can I be best spent?
Like a dollar bill before a furnace

Though the cross is thick and heavy with blood
Here's to romance beyond neglect
A pillar beaten and broken by his hand
On this, may you stand

balloons are made of rubber...
... and they float too...
as will I to Heaven once I die...

© Copyright 2006 Kenneth Craig Rogers - All Rights Reserved
stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
1 posted 2006-07-02 01:38 AM


I loved this! I’m not sure how you wanted this to be understood but how I understood it this was just way amazing.

If I was to pick a favorite spot it would have to be the whole poem, cause it’s like without one part the rest is incomplete, missing the other part of themselves… Your wording on this poem was simply brilliant, no words were wasted, and it got the point across. As for the first stanza, well, I know I say this a lot, but it made me want to read more. It was just an interesting beginning that got my curiosity up…

Good write on this one once again I loved reading your poem!

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