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Dark Poetry #4

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Sorrow
Member

since 2006-06-14

Posts 83
Ireland

0 posted 2006-06-18 09:11 PM

Piece By Piece

Rip me down,
Tear me away,
Slowly?
Quickly?
It'll happen anyway,
Gnawing in my head,
Scratching 'til I'm dead,
Bitting off my toes,
Take away my woes,
Burst this heart of pain,
Evil thoughts clogged up with shame,
Lost my love,
My self control,
My hold on life,
This dented pride,
I cannot hide,
It's all that's left,
Just let me rest...

SATURN
Member

since 2004-05-04

Posts 78
ok,us

1 posted 2006-06-19 01:49 PM

i like this it has a nice flow to it and i understand how you feel.

SATURN.

Digital_Hell
Member

since 2006-06-05

Posts 202
Amidst black roses

2 posted 2006-06-19 04:01 PM

i can relate to how you feel here.

cynical or maybe just wise? discerning? realistic?...
whatever it is, just don't let it rob you of what is truly
precious in life!

Frank W. Torres
Member

since 2006-06-10

Posts 133

3 posted 2006-06-19 09:14 PM

Feelings, explosive. Nothing more than feelings. Nice job.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

4 posted 2006-06-20 12:59 PM

Well, everyone else already said it but I also can relate to this piece on certain days.

I think you captured the despair, well, the emotions in this correctly, making this poem easy for everyone to understand and relate too. Great job

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