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Internalexile
Junior Member

since 2006-06-15

Posts 38
UK

0 posted 2006-06-17 06:36 AM

Watch the Demon that sheds an obsidian tear,
Her eyes smoulder like hot coals and her claws drip with fear.

Her mouth is a row of stalactite teeth,
Glistening within their deep alluring sheath.

Her face is a crag of rock unnamed,
Her lips are mountains yet untamed.

Her hair is wicked dark and long,
It writhes over her shoulders thick and strong.

Her arms are muscled, hard like stone,
Her fingers are long, sharp as bone.

She watches you as you watch her,
Move now quickly, lest you err.

All it’ll is the flash of an eye,
The break of a bone, the tear of a thigh.

And she will be on you quick as a flash,
Her teeth will bite deep and her fingers will gash.

That’ll be it, the end of your tale,
And she will have conquered yet another male.

So watch out when she pouts with her mountainous lips,
And do not be tricked by the sway of her hips.

All she wants is you all dead,
Because her hunger must be fed.

But soon she’ll hunger once again,
She’ll have one, she’ll have two, she’ll have five, she’ll have ten.

So when you see her, quickly run!
For you know her hungers just begun!

Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak...

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

1 posted 2006-06-17 06:53 AM

ooooh i loved the imagery in this!

All she wants is you all dead,
Because her hunger must be fed

i liked this, its very edgy

wicked
lor

as long as we laugh out loud, laugh like we're mad. because this crazy, mixed up beauty is all that we have.

Alone in the dark
Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

2 posted 2006-06-18 01:00 PM

You have a wonderfull imagination. Unique, dark, and wicked. I'm looking forward to reading more. I was starting to think I was the only twisted one til I found this forum. Isn't it great to find a place with others like us, who allow us to take off our masks and reveal what's inside our souls?

^*^Angel^*^

Internalexile
Junior Member

since 2006-06-15

Posts 38
UK

3 posted 2006-06-18 04:34 PM

Indeed, its great to know that we're not alone in being wicked and dark

Thanks for your comments I'm glad you liked it

Internalexile

Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak...

Digital_Hell
Member

since 2006-06-05

Posts 202
Amidst black roses

4 posted 2006-06-19 04:08 PM

very nicely written! and also true, know a few people like That! you arnt alone, the rest of us are just as dark, and isnt it comforting?

Inscription on hells gate reads "Abandon hope all ye that enter here"
meet you there

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

5 posted 2006-06-20 01:16 AM

"Watch the Demon that sheds an obsidian tear,
Her eyes smoulder like hot coals and her claws drip with fear."

... All I can really say is WOW, I know that doesn't do this poem justice but I can't express it in any other way.

For me the imagery in this kept me imagining even after I finished reading this, wondering what might've happened next had you continued. I loved this one!

I can't wait to see more poems by you

@-->---

rockbabe
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 105

6 posted 2006-06-27 07:32 AM

I love the way you use your words, great/ easy for the imagination. Everything was described so vivdly .

Loved IT!!!

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