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perfect stranger
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since 2006-05-29
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on cloud 9

0 posted 2006-06-15 10:03 PM


what has happened to the love of my life
only 2 year ago i became your wife
you had such a great personality and a big heart
but the way things are going soon we will part
you loved going to see celtic play football meet some friends and get drunk after
gone is a happy man who was once kind and full of laughter
now all there is coldnes arguements and dirty women this madness
taking drugs changes people makes life full of sadness
i cant take much more of this pathetic life
past while has been a struggle and strife
mabaye one day you will overdose i will no longer be your wife
hope you will be happy up in heaven no more drink dirty woman or cocaine
one day we will be together again.


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Sorrow
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since 2006-06-14
Posts 83
Ireland
1 posted 2006-06-16 12:25 PM


Your poem is so brutally honest. I feel bad for you and I hope things get better soon...
perfect stranger
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since 2006-05-29
Posts 54
on cloud 9
2 posted 2006-06-16 08:43 AM


Sorrow ,thanks a lot for your reply,i just keep thinking of the song things can only get better.
Alone in the dark
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since 2006-02-10
Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss
3 posted 2006-06-18 11:06 AM


There's sooo much pain in this poem. You're right. Drugs do change people. and destroy them, as well as thier lives. I've been there. on both sides. And they're both hell to live with. Sounds like he's hurt you badly, and I'm in no way defending his actions, but he must be wrestling some pretty big demons himself. I hope you both find your way out of this and find happiness again.

   ^*^Angel^*^

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
4 posted 2006-06-20 01:42 AM


It’s sad how people can change in such a short period of time, yes, two years is a short amount of time. I hope that no matter what happens things will improve for both of you in the end, and sooner rather than later…

This was a good poem though, it got your emotions across to us, which shows you are a talented writer in being able to make the reader feel what you have written…  Awesome job on this one, I hope that I will be able to see more of yours soon

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Digital_Hell
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since 2006-06-05
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Amidst black roses
5 posted 2006-06-20 03:02 PM


very honest and un forunately true. a very good                 rite it conveys your emtions well
perfect stranger
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since 2006-05-29
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6 posted 2006-06-20 03:05 PM


alone in the dark,thanks a lot for your kind comments,i hope to write more but im not long started so hopefully i will think of some ideas to write.
perfect stranger
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since 2006-05-29
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on cloud 9
7 posted 2006-06-20 03:07 PM


stargal,,i will put pen to paper again soon. that was kind of you to write words of encouragement about my poem  
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