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greysolace
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0 posted 2006-06-15 02:15 PM


*also, i wouls like to thank everyone who has replied to any of my poems in my time being here. u dont kno how confident they have made me in my poetry writing. thanx ^_^*


Lost in the Rain


head bowed
eyes clenched
legs pumping
heart wrenched
no doubt consumed by what i feel
but i cant find a way to deal

and as the growing darkness calls
the rain around me steadily falls

shock, anger, and confusion fill my mind like the fog of sleep
yet the thing that shakes me back into reality
is the pain

nothing physical, of course
for physical pain couldn't possibly hurt this much
no, the hurt of betrayal bypasses all senses
and strikes the heart immediately and fatally

i was so sure that i had finally gotten relief
from those years of anguish
from the memories during the day
and the nightmares waking me at night
but now i see the err of my ways
although it's his fault,
i have only myself to blame
it was I who trusted him

the falling raindrops
mingle with the sweat on my brow
and the tears obscuring my vision further
simply running
to escape my stupidity
and the sight of him

from the writhing clutter of thoughts in my conscience
one clear question arises
why?
of course this is followed by
why me?
then the last
why him?
then no more distinguishable thoughts come
for they have been drowned out by the pain once again

of all people
why him?
the one i trusted above all else
the one i would've done anything for
the one with my very soul in his hand
the one i loved

but therein lies the problem
i loved him
i trusted him way too much
he was the perfect key to my downfall
but why?

why did it have to come crashing down
when i was so close to what i wanted?
this can't be the way of the world
surely if he only knew what i was going to do
then he wouldn't have betrayed me as such
surely if he only knew how i felt
then everything would be alright
and i'd be in his arms again
but no, he ruined it
and left me,
broken in heart and spirit,
to my pain

so i ran
with nowhere to go but away
far away from that place
that now horrible place
but it doesn't matter now
the memory has already been made
and there is no going back

i now run through the rain
head bowed, eyes clenched
legs pumping, heart wrenched
far too consumed by what I feel
for me to find a way to deal

and as the growing darkness calls
the rain around me steadily falls

~~Poetry is written emotion~~
greysolace

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Sorrow
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since 2006-06-14
Posts 83
Ireland
1 posted 2006-06-15 02:20 PM


This poem is so sad. Your pain echoes through it. Great piece of writing.
Internalexile
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since 2006-06-15
Posts 38
UK
2 posted 2006-06-15 02:23 PM


Breathtaking, I too have felt the pain in betrayl, its allways most painful when its someone close to you. Great write!

Internalexile!

Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak...

Digital_Hell
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since 2006-06-05
Posts 202
Amidst black roses
3 posted 2006-06-15 02:30 PM


i love it! i have felt betrayal deeply in my soul. i can share in the pain here. keep it coming please

sic vis pucem parrabellum
if you desire peace. prepare for war.

greysolace
Member
since 2006-03-27
Posts 71

4 posted 2006-06-15 02:32 PM


thanx guys. im glad u can feel it. ^_^

~~Poetry is written emotion~~
greysolace

Tears in the rain
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since 2006-07-02
Posts 8

5 posted 2007-01-11 07:32 AM


"shock, anger, and confusion fill my mind like the fog of sleep
yet the thing that shakes me back to reality
is the pain

nothing physical, of course
for physical pain couldn't possibly hurt this much
no, the hurt of betrayal bypasses all senses
and strikes the heart immediately and fatally"

That's my favorite part. probably because I can relate so well. Incredible poem!


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