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Internalexile
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since 2006-06-15
Posts 38
UK

0 posted 2006-06-15 01:47 PM



Look into the eyes,
the deep pools of sorrow which surmount the ghostly face.
She smiles,
an empty gesture within an empty heart.
She cries no emotion shows,
but great pearly tears highlight her cheeks and drop into nothingness.

Her skin almost glows white,
it barely contains her face.
She is young but her eyes are old,
they tell tales of such sorrow that it is hard to gaze into their harsh blue beauty.
She waits,
looks ever forward,
desperately searching the abyss for comfort,
for love,
for hope.

She has been here for years,
and has found nothing,
bar the quiet rush of the sea and the lulling call of the gulls.
The wind plays game through her hair;
she doesn’t flinch in its icy grip,
but welcomes it as an old friend,
as her only friend.

The tears leave glowing moonlit patterns on her cheeks.
She longs to be kissed,
to feel the warmth of love course through her veins once more.
She cries out,
her voice cracking through the calm night,
pleading with anyone to stop her.
But they do not, only the gulls reply,
their calls mocking and wicked,
she falls.

The world has been cruel to this one;
she has no future,
only the cold rush of the sea to greet her broken body
and the soft caress of the sand to soak up her scarlet blood.
The wind still plays through her hair,
the gulls still call
and her face is still white but flecked with red.

Her eyes seem happy,
she is at rest,
the sea embraces her and she is gone.

Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak...

© Copyright 2006 Matt - All Rights Reserved
greysolace
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since 2006-03-27
Posts 71

1 posted 2006-06-15 02:11 PM


this was awesome. i cant think of any constructive critisism to give. i loved the imagery in it! i was gettin chills, i promise you!

~~Poetry is written emotion~~
greysolace

niere
Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 77

2 posted 2006-06-15 02:13 PM


Excellent first post!
It's terribly heart breaking, but the poem is so brilliant... well done.

Welcome to pip!

Sorrow
Member
since 2006-06-14
Posts 83
Ireland
3 posted 2006-06-15 02:15 PM


Your use of imagery is amazing. I really feel for this girl in your poem. Amazing.
Internalexile
Junior Member
since 2006-06-15
Posts 38
UK
4 posted 2006-06-15 02:20 PM


Thankyou friends for your comments, your praise is very kind !! I am glad you liked this poem


Thanks again,
Internalexile

Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak...

Digital_Hell
Member
since 2006-06-05
Posts 202
Amidst black roses
5 posted 2006-06-15 02:27 PM


ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT!!!!!!!!! i love it

Internalexile
Junior Member
since 2006-06-15
Posts 38
UK
6 posted 2006-06-16 03:28 AM


Thanks Again I am glad you enjoyed this poem Have a look at some of my others if you like this one!

Internalexile

Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak...

Alone in the dark
Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss
7 posted 2006-06-18 11:38 AM


It's amazing how you brought it to life through your words. I could see and feel every last heartbreaking second

   ^*^Angel^*^

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