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Red Train |
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ballajosue Junior Member
since 2006-06-04
Posts 45Ca, Us |
Red Train, full of pain, heads my way my own fame causes my pain face poured with rain filled with pain hating those fake that were on my lane shame, shame, shall be they’re new name i stake my claim because my own two raise my flame. http://truewordslie.com/ |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I loved this! It was different than a lot of things I read but I liked it because it was different. The flow was amazing in this also, I liked the way you could read this and have it kind of just roll off your tongue so smooth... Great job! "Red Train, full of pain, heads my way my own fame causes my pain" This line I love because I find it to be true for me...Okay, it's hard to explain why exactly I like it, so true for me is the easiest thing yet what I mean that I can relate well to this. Thanks for sharing this poem, I can't wait to see more from you!  @-->--- |
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