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yuna
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since 2006-05-03
Posts 9


0 posted 2006-06-02 07:49 PM



i share your youth, your heart
and soul, dissipate my life,
all eyes on you.I feel no anger,
why you dont just leave and find
someother clown to fool around.

I try again to speak my words, you
drown them out, i am too weak to shout
i cant go on, you must now stop

yet you dont feel, you just take
all my life. you suck it out, as if
some sort of poison.
this must end or i will.

© Copyright 2006 yuna - All Rights Reserved
niere
Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 77

1 posted 2006-06-03 02:19 PM


This is really good - i really like it.
It's a brilliant first post too, regardless of the stark emotion.
The emotion also comes across as very solid and chaotically calm if you know what i mean lol.  

a brilliant write.

p.s - welcome to pip!

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