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Alone in the dark
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since 2006-02-10
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On the edge of an abyss

0 posted 2006-05-15 02:53 AM


Laying alone
still with fear
Hearing sounds
no child should hear

Sounds of violence
a scream, a shout
Savage anger
bursting out

Creeping out
into the hall
Huddled down
beside the wall

Tears of pain
frustration too
Nothing I,
a child, can do

Gone to bed
still awake
Too much more
than I can take

Tears may dry
scars may mend
But will my hatred
ever end?

Still hear sounds
block them out
No more pain
no more doubt

Thoughts and feelings
left behind
I've gone away
inside my mind

© Copyright 2006 Alone in the dark - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
1 posted 2006-05-15 07:42 AM


Enjoyed the flow and rhythm of this.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Alone in the dark
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since 2006-02-10
Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss
2 posted 2006-06-05 12:15 PM


Thanks Susan. I'm glad you liked it.

   *Angel*

trUstNooNe
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since 2006-05-21
Posts 91

3 posted 2006-06-14 12:13 PM


ive been there too.very nice write.i've stopped thinking about it,but somehow it always comes back for me to think on..i like your poem alot!
Alone in the dark
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since 2006-02-10
Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss
4 posted 2006-06-14 03:27 AM


You're right. Sadly enough, it does always come back

   *Angel*

niere
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since 2006-04-23
Posts 77

5 posted 2006-06-14 04:50 AM


Very nice poem.... the rhyme is great...
But don't you just sometimes wish you could rip the memory out of a person? Oh well.

A brilliant and heartfelt piece.

rockbabe
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since 2006-01-29
Posts 105

6 posted 2006-06-29 06:01 PM


Only someone whom have lived through this type of life expereince can write about something so hurtfull.
The pain will end when you stop it....you are in control of your own feelings!!

Great Write!!!!

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
7 posted 2006-07-02 02:03 AM


Oh what we wouldn’t give to be able to erase I memories!

It did have great flow in it, which I loved. Sometimes it’s hard to find  poems with flow like this, I mean, not here on pip, but … well, yeah… nvm

This poem was awesome btw! It was so sad though when you read this you just have to cry for the little kids out there that see this happening you wish they didn’t have to go through such pain… I think that the way you worded this captured the reader and made them feel for the child. I liked that about poems, how you can read them and have things come alive in your mind and appear so real…

Great write on this one, I loved it

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playing.with.crayons
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since 2006-01-02
Posts 362
Neverland
8 posted 2006-07-02 04:32 AM


"Thoughts and feelings
left behind
I've gone away
inside my mind"

what a beautiful, haunting poem. And, might I add, if this is a true story, what a strong person you must be.
MUCH LOVE.
~cheye

Alone in the dark
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since 2006-02-10
Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss
9 posted 2006-07-02 05:56 AM


I was the child I wrote about. And unfortunately, I don't feel like I am a strong person. All too often, I still feel afraid, helpless, lost. But maybe someday........

   ^*^Angel^*^

Songbird
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184
Missouri
10 posted 2006-07-03 03:00 AM


You express yourself very well.  I can relate to many of your lines in this poem.
Writing I believe is an avenue to healing.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
11 posted 2006-07-03 10:40 PM


WOW, I Really Like This, And So Many People Can Relate. Great Write!

I Thought of You Today,
And What We Could've Had
For A Brief Moment I Had You
And Still, I Somehow Knew
I'd Have To Let Go

Alone in the dark
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since 2006-02-10
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On the edge of an abyss
12 posted 2006-07-04 05:48 AM


Thanks! Songbird, you're right. Writing is an avenue to healing, but I still have a long way to travel on that road.

   ^*^Angel^*^
              
  

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
13 posted 2006-07-04 06:23 AM


Angel,I read this earlier and printned it out in fact. So sad and yet we know too many go through this as you have. Hugs to you and hope all is well. martyjo
Alone in the dark
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since 2006-02-10
Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss
14 posted 2006-07-04 10:06 AM


Thanks martyjo. It's nice to know people care. Alot of days I have to remind myself that there are some good people in the world. I guess I've known too many of the wrong ones.

Angel

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