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Alone in the dark
Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

0 posted 2006-05-13 05:47 AM

What do you do
when the world fades away
Leaving you battered and bruised
with your life gone astray?

Wishes and dreams
you once called your own
Are a distant reminder
of a life that you'd known

You're scattered and lost
so you try to depend
On finding your way out
of a maze with no end

When you try to turn back
to the place where you started
You find that your life
as you've known has departed

Where do you go now
with your world so upturned?
You can't cross the bridges
you've already burned

So, just like the world
you begin to fade
You live in this hell;
your punishment paid

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2006-05-13 02:14 PM

*Huglets*

~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

pullingxthextrigger
Member

since 2006-05-01

Posts 133
MA,..USA llx

2 posted 2006-05-13 04:52 PM

your a talented poet. this is awesome
keep it up

~nora

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong llx - P!ATD!

UseTheIllusion
Member

since 2006-02-06

Posts 223
In a state of limbo

3 posted 2006-05-14 12:06 PM

I agree. Awesome work.

Alone in the dark
Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

4 posted 2006-05-15 01:39 AM

Thank you all very much. Your praise means alot since my poems are an expression of my life, my thoughts, my heart

Angel

Tears in the rain
New Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 8

5 posted 2006-07-12 07:25 PM

I really like this.

zaz
Junior Member

since 2006-07-09

Posts 26

6 posted 2006-07-13 01:06 PM

grit your teeth and start again, good read very true.

ambivalence
Junior Member

since 2006-07-13

Posts 15
Canada

7 posted 2006-07-13 02:06 PM

Very powerful poem, it really inundates you with emotion. It's beautiful.

Alone in the dark
Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

8 posted 2006-07-13 03:33 PM

I think I've started over about a million times. I just seem to have a knack for finding dead ends and roads that lead to nowhere.

^*^Angel^*^

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

9 posted 2006-07-14 10:12 AM

"Wishes and dreams
you once called your own
Are a distant reminder
of a life that you'd known

You're scattered and lost
so you try to depend
On finding your way out
of a maze with no end"

I loved this part, it was so... it just spoke to me in a lot of ways. I really enjoyed reading this poem!

Thanks for sharing

@-->---

gyrl_blue
Junior Member

since 2006-06-15

Posts 20
Stuck In Reality

10 posted 2006-07-15 03:08 PM

Nice, well done :)

-No Stranger To The Rain-

Bobomo
Junior Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 35

11 posted 2006-07-15 05:41 PM

An excellent poem. The emotions hit home.

Venus1974
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 79
Tennessee, USA

12 posted 2006-07-15 10:22 PM

I like this poem a lot because I can so relate and I like the nice flow too ...great work

Peace and happiness to us all, Venus

Tears in the rain
New Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 8

13 posted 2007-01-11 05:50 AM

Hey Angel! I dug up "Welcome to hell" to read again, and now that I have the list of your poems I can't stop reading. definitely worth a second look.There's many talented poets on this forum, but your poems seem to echo something from somewhere in a deep part of my heart that might actually still be alive.

Tears in the rain
New Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 8

14 posted 2007-01-11 07:46 AM

"when you try to turn back
to the place where you started
you find that your life
as you've known has departed

where do you go now
with your world so upturned?
you can't cross the bridges
you've already burned"

Loved that part! So relatable!

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

15 posted 2007-01-12 09:45 PM

Where do you go now
with your world so upturned?
You can't cross the bridges
you've already burned~

i really love your poems they are amazing this has got to be my favorite part tho. luved it...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Alone in the dark
Member

since 2006-02-10

Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss

16 posted 2007-10-22 10:41 PM

Thanks Hunnie! That's also one of my favorite parts, and sadly, way too true!
~^Angel^~

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