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featherpen
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since 2006-05-02
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0 posted 2006-05-04 10:52 AM


In a mire of proprietary jargon,
In a field of irregular landscape,
In a desert full of oasis,
I seek a pattern in the chaos;

Mind my levy, mind my mind so heavy!

In a feel that is out of touch,
In a quagmire of cruel intents,
In a well with overflowing water,
I seek some succour in wilderness;

Mind my levy, mind my mind so heavy!

The infallible tower of truth,
Laid in bricks of astonishing lies,
Falls, beneath me the ground gives in,
Mind my levy, mind my mind so heavy!

© Copyright 2006 Karthik Nagaraj - All Rights Reserved
the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
1 posted 2006-05-07 10:39 PM


Very intersting..

my favorite part in this would have to be these two lines..

"The infallible tower of truth,
Laid in bricks of astonishing lies,"

I'm not quite sure I understand your poem.. I think I'm going to read into it later on.. and then mayber I'll have some good feedback for you..

`heather


Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

featherpen
Junior Member
since 2006-05-02
Posts 12

2 posted 2006-05-11 02:51 PM


"Mind my levy"

Levy here means the inner strength I am so dependent upon to hold myself together and not breakdown...but the ley is only so strong...can only help me hold back for so long.

"My mind so heavy"

Quite obvious actually...just a mind full of worries.

Essentially, I am describing a situation that I am in and one that has made me feel extremely vulnerable.

Thank you once again for dropping by and commenting.

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