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Welcome to hell

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Kira Aso
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since 09-26-2006
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Closer to Hell...


25 posted 09-30-2006 10:21 PM       View Profile for Kira Aso   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kira Aso

This was some incredible work. I read it over and over again! Very dark.

I really enjoyed reading something a litte more on my level. (I prefer dark poems myself)

Very good! I hope to see more of your work.

Thanks for the great write...Kira
Brittany
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since 09-26-2006
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26 posted 10-01-2006 05:58 PM       View Profile for Brittany   Email Brittany   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brittany

Wow, this was an amazing poem, I really really enjoyed it. I cant think of anything else to say....wow.

~Life Ain't Always Beautiful~

Moonkist
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since 09-29-2006
Posts 198
Pennsylvania


27 posted 10-02-2006 06:00 AM       View Profile for Moonkist   Email Moonkist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Moonkist

WoW!  What a great first poem to post!!  Very happy you decided to share this wonderful poem.  So relatable, understandable... Isn't poetry a wonderful way to express ourselves?

The loneiness ... I've been there, different circumstances, but, was there... and I got out... reached out.... anyways!

Look forward to reading more of you, AloneInTheDark, so write on!

Peace,
Moonkist
hunnie_girl
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28 posted 10-02-2006 01:19 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

amazing post Welcome to pip

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

Alone in the dark
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since 02-10-2006
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On the edge of an abyss


29 posted 10-03-2006 03:44 AM       View Profile for Alone in the dark   Email Alone in the dark   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alone in the dark

WOW! You all have left me speechless. I haven't been on in awhile, so the last thing I expected was to click on and see one of my poems back on the first page. Especially with such an amazing response! I want to thank everyone for taking the time to read this and for sharing your thoughts about it. And Walter,thanks! Not only for dusting this off, but also for the praise. I don't think I've ever been paid such a wonderful compliment!                         
   *^*Angel*^*
Walter Poe
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30 posted 10-13-2006 11:11 AM       View Profile for Walter Poe   Email Walter Poe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Walter Poe

Actually going to do something i never do and reply to a reply.

You going to have a nothing shock when you log on back the first page.

A good poem is a good poem and i'm still thinking sorry about the wait i will write the poem i owe you just have about six other projects on the go(looking into getting a novel or two published some short stories and designing a game hmm. Plus looking for a new job.) so bear with me

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Spine Grinder
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since 10-28-2000
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Standing In Silence...


31 posted 10-13-2006 11:16 PM       View Profile for Spine Grinder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Spine Grinder

Wow...I find few poems that hold my attention like this one did...This was an excellent read. Welcome to passions.

"My soul is adrift in oceans of madness
Repairing the rift that you have created"~ Disturbed

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot
Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...


32 posted 10-13-2006 11:19 PM       View Profile for Spine Grinder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Spine Grinder

Ah...I forgot to add this to my library the first go around..so..yes, thanks for the great read. again. lol.

"My soul is adrift in oceans of madness
Repairing the rift that you have created"~ Disturbed

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

idntcareifudntcare
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since 10-18-2006
Posts 16
BC, Canada


33 posted 10-18-2006 01:24 AM       View Profile for idntcareifudntcare   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for idntcareifudntcare

wow.. ur soo talented.. i mean like u rili caught me.. u save my life! lol (mcr) ....

xxx

shatteredsilver
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since 03-31-2005
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middle of nowhere


34 posted 10-21-2006 09:57 PM       View Profile for shatteredsilver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for shatteredsilver

Wow.

This is something I really like - the way you made me think of hell as a place that would send out a welcome wagon, sort of try and make the people who come feel like they belong - in a nice way...eep!

Wonderful and thought provoking
Alone in the dark
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since 02-10-2006
Posts 105
On the edge of an abyss


35 posted 01-10-2007 05:43 AM       View Profile for Alone in the dark   Email Alone in the dark   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alone in the dark

There will always be a welcome wagon. You know what they say, "misery loves company"....I just didn't realize before I had any

~*~Angel~*~
Tears in the rain
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36 posted 01-11-2007 03:05 AM       View Profile for Tears in the rain   Email Tears in the rain   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Tears in the rain

I just got a little confused. (happens a lot,lol!) I saw "Welcome to Hell" and thought I'd reread it. I wondered why it didn't seem familiar til I noticed it was a different poem by someone else. Anyway, thought I'd dig this up and read it again since it was on my mind. As with the first time I read it, it kept my attention from beg
gining to end. Amazing!

sisterlynx
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37 posted 01-17-2007 05:38 AM       View Profile for sisterlynx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sisterlynx

I'm fond of the cryptic as well, so really I liked this.  
Alone in the dark
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since 02-10-2006
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On the edge of an abyss


38 posted 01-17-2007 08:12 AM       View Profile for Alone in the dark   Email Alone in the dark   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alone in the dark

   Awww, the people in this forum are the best! It's good (in a tragic sort of way) to finally know that someone else understands. Scarlett, I read your poem "for Theresa" and I'm sorry that you're dealing with something like that. It's heartbreaking to watch somebody you love suffer, and know that you can't fix it. God bless you both!

~*~Angel~*~         

Angel4aKing
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since 09-27-2006
Posts 1376
USA


39 posted 02-13-2007 10:31 PM       View Profile for Angel4aKing   Email Angel4aKing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel4aKing

Welcome to passions.....you sound like my roommate....He don't share his poetry often...don't worry I'm working on it!!!!
But in hell, deals break
and there is no appeal

My favorite part.....It tells me be careful of your deals.....


~~~kingsangel~~~
Alone in the dark
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since 02-10-2006
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On the edge of an abyss


40 posted 02-14-2007 10:19 PM       View Profile for Alone in the dark   Email Alone in the dark   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alone in the dark

Thanks for your reply Angel4AKing
but just to clear things up, it's not MY deals you have to be careful of. This hell is the emotional dungeon my world has been lost in, and I,m just another inmate, not the jailkeeper! lol

~*~Angel~*~
RavenSmith
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since 03-02-2007
Posts 53
Oregon


41 posted 03-02-2007 05:53 PM       View Profile for RavenSmith   Email RavenSmith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RavenSmith's Home Page   View IP for RavenSmith

I enjoy dark poems myself. Inner hell also a chaos that seems to control ones self. I thought your poem had a nice delivery of what most of us fear.

~Best Regards,Raven Smith

Alone in the dark
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since 02-10-2006
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On the edge of an abyss


42 posted 03-03-2007 03:16 PM       View Profile for Alone in the dark   Email Alone in the dark   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alone in the dark

Thank you Raven. This kind of chaos does have alot of control,therefor making it so hard to overcome. but, maybe someday........

~*~Angel~*~
              
            
L. Ottanio
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since 04-17-2007
Posts 27
Connecticut, USA


43 posted 04-19-2007 12:24 AM       View Profile for L. Ottanio   Email L. Ottanio   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit L. Ottanio's Home Page   View IP for L. Ottanio

i love dark poems about death, destruction and drugs and addictions - i write many myself... I really liked being invited to take a mini tour of hell... i am published poet. I mean I write books.  So you might want do consider the stanza's in brackets - check out how i reworded them to make them sound better read out-loud.

So you sell your soul
in exchange for a deal
But in hell, deals break
and there is no appeal

The peace you were promised
never enters your mind
(change to read An end to your nightmares)
you’ll never to find

If this sounds like a place
that you'd like to be
Take hold of my hand
and go there with me (if you want to use there - it should read go there with me, if you use here it could read and come here with me

But first, I must warn you
of that which you'll lose
So listen carefully
before you choose

(this stanza makes more sense and sounds better read aloud) my opinion of course

[The 1st thing to go is your soul
Then the devil takes your heart
Soon after that your sanity
Will most definitely depart]

[When you're lost and lonely
not knowing what you need
it's this chaos and confusion
that pure evil feeds]

So you sink even lower
inside of this place
And you put on a mask
to cover your face

So that nobody knows
the pain that you hide
And nobody knows
the place you reside

[This much is true
I can you with certainty
You will burn in hell
For an eternity]
lovergurl
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since 05-08-2007
Posts 61
va


44 posted 05-10-2007 11:23 PM       View Profile for lovergurl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lovergurl

o_0!!
i love this!!
omg.
this poem is very, very, VERY powerful, and i love it.
great job!!
please post some more. =]

Becca.

qtpieelmo
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since 07-04-2000
Posts 1008
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY


45 posted 05-12-2007 07:39 PM       View Profile for qtpieelmo   Email qtpieelmo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for qtpieelmo

woW Great Write!!! This reminds me of a poem of mine called No Return. Love this. I hope to see more of you soon!!!

ELMO

"Dream as if you'll live forever. Live as if you'll die today!!"

Moon Dust
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46 posted 05-13-2007 09:17 PM       View Profile for Moon Dust   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Moon Dust

You speak truth here. Sometimes life can feel quite like hell.
tearsofpain
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since 05-03-2007
Posts 37


47 posted 06-03-2007 04:37 AM       View Profile for tearsofpain   Email tearsofpain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for tearsofpain

wow i love this one
BrittanyJ
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since 06-03-2007
Posts 460
Come find me?


48 posted 06-03-2007 03:45 PM       View Profile for BrittanyJ   Email BrittanyJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BrittanyJ

Oh wow! i loved it!! I am looking forward to seeing more!
hunnie_girl
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49 posted 07-01-2008 11:38 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

ahh it has been indeed a long long time since this poem was written just going to see what this new generation of darks think of it.. really liked it the 1st time angel loved it the 2nd go around.. my gawd.. has it really been two years lol..
Krysti
 
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