WOW! You all have left me speechless. I haven't been on in awhile, so the last thing I expected was to click on and see one of my poems back on the first page. Especially with such an amazing response! I want to thank everyone for taking the time to read this and for sharing your thoughts about it. And Walter,thanks! Not only for dusting this off, but also for the praise. I don't think I've ever been paid such a wonderful compliment! *^*Angel*^*
Actually going to do something i never do and reply to a reply.
You going to have a nothing shock when you log on back the first page.
A good poem is a good poem and i'm still thinking sorry about the wait i will write the poem i owe you just have about six other projects on the go(looking into getting a novel or two published some short stories and designing a game hmm. Plus looking for a new job.) so bear with me
Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Standing In Silence...
This is something I really like - the way you made me think of hell as a place that would send out a welcome wagon, sort of try and make the people who come feel like they belong - in a nice way...eep!
Wonderful and thought provoking
Alone in the dark
On the edge of an abyss
I just got a little confused. (happens a lot,lol!) I saw "Welcome to Hell" and thought I'd reread it. I wondered why it didn't seem familiar til I noticed it was a different poem by someone else. Anyway, thought I'd dig this up and read it again since it was on my mind. As with the first time I read it, it kept my attention from beg gining to end. Amazing!
Awww, the people in this forum are the best! It's good (in a tragic sort of way) to finally know that someone else understands. Scarlett, I read your poem "for Theresa" and I'm sorry that you're dealing with something like that. It's heartbreaking to watch somebody you love suffer, and know that you can't fix it. God bless you both!
Thanks for your reply Angel4AKing but just to clear things up, it's not MY deals you have to be careful of. This hell is the emotional dungeon my world has been lost in, and I,m just another inmate, not the jailkeeper! lol
i love dark poems about death, destruction and drugs and addictions - i write many myself... I really liked being invited to take a mini tour of hell... i am published poet. I mean I write books. So you might want do consider the stanza's in brackets - check out how i reworded them to make them sound better read out-loud.
So you sell your soul in exchange for a deal But in hell, deals break and there is no appeal
The peace you were promised never enters your mind (change to read An end to your nightmares) you’ll never to find
If this sounds like a place that you'd like to be Take hold of my hand and go there with me (if you want to use there - it should read go there with me, if you use here it could read and come here with me
But first, I must warn you of that which you'll lose So listen carefully before you choose
(this stanza makes more sense and sounds better read aloud) my opinion of course
[The 1st thing to go is your soul Then the devil takes your heart Soon after that your sanity Will most definitely depart]
[When you're lost and lonely not knowing what you need it's this chaos and confusion that pure evil feeds]
So you sink even lower inside of this place And you put on a mask to cover your face
So that nobody knows the pain that you hide And nobody knows the place you reside
[This much is true I can you with certainty You will burn in hell For an eternity]
ahh it has been indeed a long long time since this poem was written just going to see what this new generation of darks think of it.. really liked it the 1st time angel loved it the 2nd go around.. my gawd.. has it really been two years lol.. Krysti