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Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

0 posted 2006-03-10 08:11 PM

It’s a serene night on pretty Park Avenue,
The streets are calm, the footpath worn
The sky will convert to blue in the morning
But right now they wear the black I used to show off
With the cherry lipstick.

The brilliant colours line up.
My ruby red shoes pass the time patiently outside your door,
They eagerly await your return, but
What they don’t know, is the only thing I do.
You won’t be coming back.

The curtains are shut and it might just rain,
The house is empty but it looks the same.
Such a peaceful collision
The blue blue light and the chocolate dark.

I wait outside your door where the ink still paints the sky,
It’s been a long time; still I don’t believe you can fly.

You won’t be coming back to pretty Park Avenue,
You won’t be coming back to me.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

1 posted 2006-03-14 03:05 PM

very image inspriing i cant help but see the picture you are painting.

A cange is going to come...

vampiana
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere

2 posted 2006-05-09 03:48 AM

oh gosh courts, this is so sad and so lonely, but it is also so wonderfully written. inspiring imagery all the way through!

"
I wait outside your door where the ink still paints the sky,
It’s been a long time; still I don’t believe you can fly.

You won’t be coming back to pretty Park Avenue,
You won’t be coming back to me. "

The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return.

niere
Member

since 2006-04-23

Posts 77

3 posted 2006-05-09 05:43 PM

very dejected emotion here - but like the others said - beautiful poem.

''The sky will convert to blue in the morning
But right now they wear the black I used to show off
With the cherry lipstick.''

i'm pretty much obsessed with the sky and it's many colours, so i enjoyed the way you phrased that line.

brilliant read.

silhouetted
Senior Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 537
New Zealand

4 posted 2006-05-10 03:11 AM

The curtains are shut and it might just rain,
The house is empty but it looks the same.
Such a peaceful collision
The blue blue light and the chocolate dark.

I wait outside your door where the ink still paints the sky,
It’s been a long time; still I don’t believe you can fly.

You won’t be coming back to pretty Park Avenue,
You won’t be coming back to me.
aw this is so sad
so beautifully written
especially the peaceful collision, PHWOAR wat a beautiful line

HEART U

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

5 posted 2006-05-13 01:20 AM

dammennit....when i twaz trying to stray from this forum a bit, you go 'n get all fair dinkum on me, courts!!
this was awesome. i've been a bit busy as o' late, but i had to stop and give a shout out to me fave all-black!!!

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

pullingxthextrigger
Member

since 2006-05-01

Posts 133
MA,..USA llx

6 posted 2006-05-13 05:00 PM

very very nice. painted a picture in my mind
Keep it up

~nora<3

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong llx - P!ATD!

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

7 posted 2006-05-16 02:50 AM

Thank you everyone! I really appreciate it, hugely.

Aw Lor and Kirst, too nice to me, truly.

Mike! Buddy! *hugs* I'm glad you came back, if only for a little. Thanks for replying my fave... (and only) New Yorkian! Hehe.

Courts.
Hollow.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

8 posted 2006-05-16 04:55 AM

love you

beautiful poem courts

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

9 posted 2006-05-21 02:51 AM

They're Right, It's Vivid, and Beautiful, Nice Write!

-Trina

I Thought of You Today,
And What We Could've Had
For A Brief Moment I Had You
And Still, I Somehow Knew
I'd Have To Let Go

Fabiani
Member

since 2006-05-12

Posts 123
Mesa, Az

10 posted 2006-05-22 06:47 PM

beatiful poem i love ne poems about the night^_^~ <3

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

11 posted 2006-05-22 10:38 PM

I can understand why
you believe this to be a
dark poem...

but how the hope, thought slim,
shimmers through...

lighting a candle
for someone to walk away
from the Pretty Park Avenue...

beautiful work here.

I'm glad I rumbled into it....

and stumbled away, in awe.

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

12 posted 2006-06-03 01:11 AM

"Serene... Calm... Brilliant... Empty... Peaceful..."
Yes, this describes the dichotomy of Park Avenue and the Boulevard of Relationships...
Incredible poem, Hollow!

Wings bruised from turning away in such confined space...Not broken...still healable...still feathered with life, somewhere

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