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Jack Straw
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since 2006-03-02
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0 posted 2006-03-03 08:46 AM


The being lives upstairs In celestial harmony
Its described as omnipotent and all-knowing
It has been dormant for thousands of years leaving its children to be
While It's establishments live in entropy and confusion
It also claims to be stronger than it's rival
Although it's rival seems to have control of the creation
So ask yourself is the being omnipotent at all?
Is the being even real?

This was the first poem I wrote, I was 15 when I wrote it..  I still have a conflicted view on religion, I'm not so atheistic anymore however.

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Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
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1 posted 2006-03-03 08:52 AM


I've asked the same questions...

and have no answers.

Good writing, especially for a then 15 yr old!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

byski
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since 2006-01-26
Posts 235
Alberta, Canada
2 posted 2006-03-03 07:14 PM


Great vocabulary for a 15 y/o. It has a solid and stong motion that carries throughout the end. Hits hard, u know what I mean? That has some creativity.
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