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SATURN
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ok,us

0 posted 2006-02-22 12:45 PM


My Eternal World within
the life of my soul
where all things never die
never hurt or want for anything.
Everything has somebody to love and
be loved by somebody. No one will be
left alone.
My Soul keeps My Eternal World Safe
and never lets the lies of your thoughts
poison it.
My Eternal World within
the life of my soul
I dwell alone to watch over others
and to keep them safe.
In My Eternal World I must be alone
to Complete my Job.

~HALI~
2/22/06

© Copyright 2006 Hali - All Rights Reserved
deadkiss
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since 2006-02-11
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washington
1 posted 2006-02-25 01:36 AM


interesting concept. i like it, i often feel like i have to be alone as well.
SATURN
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since 2004-05-04
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ok,us
2 posted 2006-06-19 01:45 PM


thanks i feel this way when i am in total peace with myself that is most of the time.

SATURN.

Frank W. Torres
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since 2006-06-10
Posts 133

3 posted 2006-06-19 06:59 PM


Very Good.
Sorrow
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since 2006-06-14
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Ireland
4 posted 2006-06-19 07:35 PM


Good poem. It gives me a sense of hope. We all need that sometimes.
trUstNooNe
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since 2006-05-21
Posts 91

5 posted 2006-06-21 02:41 PM


nice write..i love it..>>
"I dwell alone to watch over others
and to keep them safe.
In My Eternal World I must be alone
to Complete my Job."..<< my favorite part,u deffinatley described me..*..
nice job!!

Digital_Hell
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since 2006-06-05
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Amidst black roses
6 posted 2006-06-21 04:59 PM


rathere gopefull which is nice. and the we all need our peace. nice write!

hells gate reads Abandon hope all ye that enter here
shall we go?
the road to hell is paved with good intentions.
Will you walk with me?

niere
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since 2006-04-23
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7 posted 2006-06-22 06:33 AM


I love this as I can relate to this big time...

''I dwell alone to watch over others
and to keep them safe.
In My Eternal World I must be alone
to Complete my Job.''

Worded great, and very deep. Brilliant poem.

rockbabe
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since 2006-01-29
Posts 105

8 posted 2006-06-25 06:52 AM


Very Enjoyable...
stargal
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since 2006-03-06
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OR USA
9 posted 2006-06-26 09:49 AM


"My Eternal World within
the life of my soul
where all things never die
never hurt or want for anything.
"

If only life could always be like this! I loved the way you described it, your "eternal world", simply awesome in the way you put that...

This, for me, was a pleasure to read. I can't wait to see what you come up with next

@-->---

SATURN
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since 2004-05-04
Posts 78
ok,us
10 posted 2006-08-16 01:48 AM


THANK YOU ALL FOR YOUR WORDS.
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