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deadkiss
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since 2006-02-11
Posts 31
washington

0 posted 2006-02-11 09:37 PM



here comes the wolves,
fangs dripping druel and blood
grey in color
a leader painted white

moving into kill
gnash, gnaw, tear flesh
silent screams fill the air
for no one but the trees

tullips and daisies shall grow
where a decaying body lyes
as wolves finish off the feast
a mystique arrives

out of night
a man more blood thirsty then the rest
blood red eyes
razor sharp claws

quietly approach the wolves
lightly picking the biggest
in a frenzy wolves attack
he decapitates there limbs

under the summer night
the stalker prowls
searching for something..someone

coming to a stop
his heart skips a beat
infront mistress of the night
the devil in the flesh

flowing black hair
blood dripping fangs
from persed red lips
wind rushes through her hair

as she walks
death shall follow
the stalker moving closer
searching for words he's lost

"I love you" he whispers
a smile lights her lips
fire burns her eyes
not a word she speak

snooth, fingers press his neck
fangs drawing blood
pleasurable pain passes
with stinging fangs of life

looking in his eyes
she licks her lips
falling exhausted in her arms
secret passion of lover's night

© Copyright 2006 chance motta - All Rights Reserved
Kaos
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since 2001-08-02
Posts 317
between space and time
1 posted 2006-02-13 07:39 PM


That was awesome.  Excellent descriptions of the hunting and feasting and the overall carrying of the emotional sense of the piece... absolutely enjoyed this.  There were a couple of small spell errors i saw though:    druel- drool   and lyes- lies

but excellent first post and welcome to PiP, look forward to more posts

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-i wrote it somewhere in time

deadkiss
Junior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 31
washington
2 posted 2006-02-14 06:20 PM


oh yes i noticed that in another forum, and went through and edited it. i shall try and change it to the edited version. thank you for the feedback and the welcome.
kitvb1
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since 2006-01-23
Posts 28
Trebgast, Germany
3 posted 2006-03-01 04:26 AM


I think this is excellent... thanx for sharing.  Kit

We've all been there. How we deal with it determines our paths.

kitvb1@hotmail.com

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