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Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2006-01-29 02:12 PM

I have been sent,
From a place not my home,
But which could be,
If I don’t bring back a soul,

Sorry that it has to be you,
The first one I spot,
In this evening’s mist,
All your hopes lost,

I have come not for your shell,
For it fades in few years,
But the soul that remains young,
That indeed is very dear,

My soul has been damned,
Ready for it’s salivation,
If I bring another one,
That is ready for donation,

You’ve lived as if this is your life,
Didn’t recognize from your first breath,
Your soul had been won,
By Satan from hell,

So gloom this time has become,
All colored faded from you façade,
As if you have died already,
Waiting for a million years to get your chance,

This is true, that you will get a chance,
But in turn you will be asked the same task,
Bring another soul and you shall be saved,
This cycle continues, never seeing an end.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

Musicmaker1969

Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 589
Peterborough, Ontario Canada

1 posted 2006-02-16 01:38 AM

WEll, as much as I like your poem, I disagree with the way of salvation. But that is what makes us unique is that we have our differences. In my faith, all I have to do is invite Jesus, who we consider Lord, into our hearts and live the best we can for Him and we are saved. We don't need to bring another soul with us. We can win them for Him but it is not a requirement for us to get into Heaven. Your poem made me think some. It's neat to see what each individual thinks about God, salvation and the like. Nicely done. Any poem that can make a person think is a good poem.
Sheri Adams

Jesus lives in my heart! He can in yours too!!!
Sheri Liegh Adams
sheriliegh@sympatico.ca

desert-spike
Member

since 2006-02-01

Posts 194
TX/USA

2 posted 2006-02-16 02:10 PM

I disagree with your presentational concept of salvation, too.

Aside from that however, I greatly enjoyed reading your poem. It's cute, and amusing, and {darkly} hilarious.

deadkiss
Junior Member

since 2006-02-11

Posts 31
washington

3 posted 2006-02-16 08:58 PM

i wont judge your opinions on salvation because what i like about writing is you can change reality to anything you want. but you spelled it with a typo and put an i in it. a rather good poem i think.

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