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Sharksbean
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since 2005-09-25
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0 posted 2006-01-16 07:24 PM


a demon from hell
come to hunt you down
to rip out your soul
to turn your smile to a frown

he brings death
death with his very breath

it steals your hope
and brings only despair
when this abomination comes beware

this demon is relentless
he leaves none alive
you'd better hurry
go run and hide
for he is coming inside
one word is all it takes
to take your life wholly and completely
he shouts the word

D-I-I-I-I-I-I-E-E-E-E

-may the force be with you in poetry

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Kaos
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since 2001-08-02
Posts 317
between space and time
1 posted 2006-01-17 11:15 AM


kinda dark and cryptic, but very cool in it's own depicted images kind of way. Cool post

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-i wrote it somewhere in time

sanozatsho
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since 2006-01-26
Posts 14

2 posted 2006-01-31 12:21 PM


i enjoy the structure and the flow of this work however i feel there could be more detail.  it does give me the oh shit where is death feeling though i would like to see more detail.
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