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Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
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New Zealand

0 posted 2006-01-10 01:44 AM


A tin fence
Beside my candle.
I watch you swat away a moth
I hated creepy crawlies.
Flickering
In and out and back again.
To touch
Your skin is bare.
Copper clouds
Thinking you must be going blind behind your sunglasses.
Relationship with God?
No, he never made an effort to get to know me.
Neon lights?
Yeah just as we thought, but I’m not in heaven, yet.

You know, I used to be an angel,
Before I ever donned those wings,
Fitting only in his religion.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

© Copyright 2006 Courtney - All Rights Reserved
Kaos
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since 2001-08-02
Posts 317
between space and time
1 posted 2006-01-20 11:13 AM


this was neat,
'Copper clouds
Thinking you must be going blind behind your sunglasses'

i loved this grouping and i found the ending to be quite intriguing as well.  Cool post thanks for sharing

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-i wrote it somewhere in time

vampiana
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 296
Nothing and Nowhere
2 posted 2006-01-24 05:57 AM


man, you freakin' rock my world with your poetry.

"You know, I used to be an angel,
Before I ever donned those wings,
Fitting only in his religion."

The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return.

silhouetted
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since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
3 posted 2006-01-24 08:39 PM


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MAY
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ZING

this was amazing courts! I LOVE IT

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

darkness_witch
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since 2003-12-03
Posts 516
Underneath
4 posted 2006-01-25 03:19 AM


oooooooooooooooooohhhhhhhh wonderful.

you're so beautiful and wonderful and amazing and i love you and miss you to bits.

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

EveGnosis
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since 2002-02-21
Posts 300
New York, USA
5 posted 2006-01-29 12:23 PM


you reminded me of my second ever screenname "devilwithnowings" that i changed from "angelwithwings". and i noticed your poem forms the shape of the anchor that is weighing you down in this poem.
god courts, i love ya. never forger how amazing you are in your poetic musings!

your thespian admirer,

mike

of all the things we try to find... it's only love we keep.

Hollow_Emptiness
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since 2004-02-01
Posts 715
New Zealand
6 posted 2006-01-30 07:07 PM


Aw, thank you all so much.

Thank you Kaos, for reading and replying.
Kurst for just being cool nd supportive.
I love Laura Davie to bit and pieces.
Same as above for Sopho.

Ah, Mike, you are too cool. I see a new post of yours, must read!

Hollow.
Courts.

Come on God, do I seem bulletproof?

coyote
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since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077

7 posted 2006-01-30 09:09 PM


"Thinking you must be going blind behind your sunglasses."

This line is really kewl, Courts.
Loved the write.

coyote 8)

"Only the dead, have seen the end of war."
Plato

stratagem888
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since 2006-02-15
Posts 4

8 posted 2006-02-16 12:14 PM


I like the subtle, religious theme behind this work and the cyrptic nature of it.
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