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Frozen Laughter
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since 2005-12-24
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0 posted 2005-12-24 03:55 AM


This is my third poem I have ever written. I wrote two poems three years ago. But, this is my latest one.

Feel free to comment however you like. This poem is very true and is how I really feel.

"Hidden Emotions"


You may know me as Dan
I am known as the funny man
When I start to feel sad again
I try to do what I can
To make you my fan

Can you not understand?
Why my life is so bland?

All I'm known for is comedy
You don't even take me seriously
I can not even speak freely
Without you mocking me
I dont even know who to be

Can you not see?
What you have done to me?

This is how I feel everyday
Sorry I have to express myself this way
Almost every night I pray
That God wont let me go astray
I can feel the sky turning grey

Will tomorrow be a new day?
Will I feel okay?

I pray the sky will be blue
So that I can express my love for you
Hopefully you can love me too
Please understand what I have been through
The jokes are no longer new

Can you see my point of view?
Do you even have a clue?

I want to just quit
I am so sick of it
Deep in my body my prayers sit
Please God make me how you see fit
I will try my best not to forfeit


In time will you forget?
Did you deal the final hit?

© Copyright 2005 Frozen Laughter - All Rights Reserved
Frozen Laughter
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since 2005-12-24
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1 posted 2005-12-25 08:33 PM


no replies?
Annie78
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here then there then back here
2 posted 2005-12-26 11:54 AM


this is strange for me....i know someone named Dan who very well may be feeling this way right now. please know that it does get better....i have also been here. the people here are all very supportive and we welcome you. don't quit for you would only be letting yourself down. if this is how you feel and you need a friend feel free to email me and maybe we can chat.
Annie

there is but a short time to exist, love,laugh,live and never stop believing in miracles

Frozen Laughter
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since 2005-12-24
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3 posted 2005-12-27 05:53 PM


thanks.

i just have my moments.

what did you think about the poem though?

Annie78
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since 2003-10-03
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here then there then back here
4 posted 2005-12-27 06:26 PM


i liked it very much....and it invoked a feeling of something lost, but i know i have moved on. you said things that i could relate to and so therefore has meaning for me.
Annie

there is but a short time to exist, love,laugh,live and never stop believing in miracles

shades of paul
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since 2005-12-14
Posts 370
In Reality
5 posted 2005-12-28 12:06 PM


I enjoyed your poem,a good write....paul

shades of paul,peace,love,and happiness

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