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babblez New Member
since 2005-11-23
Posts 1 |
I feel death upon me As I force myself to breathe. The sudden shock of the blow That brought me to my knees. Will anyone reach me And be able to help me out. Or do I surrender To pain, regrets and doubts. As I look down to the gun at my side I realize I am not ready to die. I ask god for strenth and to show me the way I think i would rather just live for today. Copywrite @2001 Dorothy Webster-Wainright |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
That was actually really cool. I'm pretty used to writing about not feeling ready and inspite of that doing it anyway. Its not where I live, its that I do. But no matter where I go I live with Christ too. -GIS Praise the eternal reign, the Father; Jesus Christ; and the Holy Spirit. |
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HAZMATTO Junior Member
since 2005-11-24
Posts 14 |
VERY DEEP. ALOT OF PERSONAL FEELINGS WELLED UP INSIDE OF YOU. I'M GLAD YOU DECIDED TO WRITE INSTEAD OF PULLING THE TRIGGER. SUICIDE IS A PERMANENT SOLUTION TO A TEMPORARY PROBLEM. KEEP WRITING. IF YOU NEED TO BE IN TOUCH WITH SOMEONE, I'LL BE YOUR FRIEND. |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Welcome to Passions, we hope you enjoy your time here, please check your email for a special greeting Greeneyes~ ~~**~~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Life is certainly worth fighting for. Welcome to Passions. Keep writing as you are good at it.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Annie78 Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 469here then there then back here |
Have been exactly where this writing is about, a very nice cop was my friend, and God was my saviour that night. Not preaching at you, just letting you know that He is out there. Thank you for writing and if you ever just need someone who has been there you can email me at anytime. Not promising it will be easy to live but is always always worth it. Annie there is but a short time to exist, love,laugh,live and never stop believing in miracles |
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silverwind Junior Member
since 2005-12-07
Posts 37that place over there |
I'M NOT BEING SEXIST, but life can be a bitch at times, and that bitch needs a slap now and then. silverwind |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
welcome to pip. good treatment of a horse that has been overflogged. the sentiments are old but you rythm and rhyme in an impressively natural way. i am huge believer in ebb and flow. i look forward to more. ps: that pink font is hard to see on the blue, i had to highlight it to read. -majnu |
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kitvb1 Junior Member
since 2006-01-23
Posts 28Trebgast, Germany |
Very interesting and well written. Leaves one to wonder, was the blow the bullet, or another disappointment in life? Are you on your knees about to do it, or because you have already done it? Are you asking for strength to survive the bullet or to carry on? Very good. ty. We've all been there. How we deal with it determines our paths. |
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Kaos Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317between space and time |
Very beautifully worded, it made the feeling crawl right underneath of my skin. I think we've all been hopeless before and all you can do is push on... anyway sorry for rambling, excellent write and welcome to PiP Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free |
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