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Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
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0 posted 2005-11-04 10:00 AM


absence of the mind collors can't even seem to mingle, they sway to the brick walls no way out/
nothingness felt all over my body as if there radiates a reflection of once was there.
Feeling something running, oozing from my arms
yet I stand with no disregard, doe anyone else even notice the palenss of my skin, no sounds coming from the hollow body just swaying toward the brick wall trying to find the door that disappeared, I hear a very small sound behind the wall maybe trying to save me from myself, but how will I know with not a window in place to see.
I began clawing at the wall hopeful for my redemption, yet all I hear is the wind. sadly I wimper to sleep to dream of the girl who loved life, now longing to wake up to feel the nothingness, the warmth it covers her with.

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Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
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Brooksville, Fl, U.S
1 posted 2005-11-06 07:16 AM


A very Unique very and style you use here and it works very well. I enjoyed the read very much and hope to see more. On a side note watch spelling and puncuation

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
2 posted 2005-11-07 11:35 PM


thx Jeremiah,sometimes my fingers get ahead of me.
Kaos
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since 2001-08-02
Posts 317
between space and time
3 posted 2005-11-19 11:23 AM


Ditto on the unique style, thanks for the read

"Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light"
-Dylan Thomas

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